Poetry Forum

I take note of your comments Ros. To answer your question about language choice - in short, William Blake. I was reading Blake at the time and I love the drama of his poetry and what it attempts to achieve philosophically. I love Romantic poetry and the way nature figures in both a simple everyday w...

Dear JJ, Mac, and Mark - thank you ever so much for reading my poem! I am very grateful for the audience and to have your feedback! Your comments have been stimulating and I have my work cut out for me. I definitely subscribe to the idea that the author is dead, and that the reader's interpretation ...

Thank you for reading it, Nar! I will try out something fiercer (?) in the places you have suggested and see what comes of it. It is really great to get some feedback for this reason - sometimes it's difficult to see the words/images that aren't working and it helps to have another's eyes for it. :D

Delicate and evocative! I really like the way this poem feels. Fifi

I've been working on this for a couple of years on and off. It has another part which is stranger, different, but still about the fog and what it does, particualry at night! I'll post it sometime soon. I would like to send this one away and would like help with getting it up to scratch. Many thanks!...

Hello all, Thank you for taking the time to read this post. I am Fifi Mae and I have been privately writing poetry for about five years. I'm pretty shy to part with it, or to send it away - I often feel like it is unfinished. The more formal aspects of poetry/poetic form are not my strength. I guess...

Romantic, cadenced poem! The prose style speaks of the past but I can't see why it couldn't be made/used in a contemporary form ... perhaps more cues (like the ringing phone) which do the work of bringing an older language-form into a newer context. Fifi

I like that your poem-utopia can be located in a place - the centre, or within - but has no limits. I do wonder, however, in terms of your adaptation of Augustine, how the idea of utopia replaces or reworks the idea of the divine/God in original formulation? And why this is so? Fifi