Poetry Forum

The opening two lines are promising, but it does get a bit clichéd after that - castles in the air, kindled romance, madness you shall find. Despite your explanation of profound, I'd still prefer deepness. Yeah it is a bit clichéd I guess, something I'll work on to try change. Thanks for the input!...

Hi Jackie, Thanks for the feedback! The reason that stanza 1 and 2 are ordered in that way is because the "romance" is supposed to fill the emptiness mentioned in stanza 1, not create it. I never realised I misspelled descent... oops... the use of "profound" is in it's noun form....

Hello, it's been around a year since I've had any poetry related activities take precedence and this is the first thing I've written since the long break. Any feedback would be appreciated. I also have not yet named this poem. Well, here it is; Second Edition (Spelling Correction) We do not know the...

We try to be what we are not, To find the path we've always sought, Through lies untold we shed the light, And seek the dawn that ends the night. The sun will rise, the moon shan't set, Our fears of night are not gone yet, They'll follow us throughout the day, How sad it is they pave the way. To fin...

I truly enjoyed this poem. You made me feel as if I was lying looking at the moon myself. Some really good work!

Hi, I agree with the comment before about the layout of the poem. If it wasn't intentional then I'd recommend converting it into the standard line by line style. Also, I fear that I cannot understand what the meaning of the poem is. I find it to be, much like David said before me, too abstract. Perh...

Hi all, My name is David and I've recently come into the ways of writing poetry. I am a student at college and currently stusdy the life sciences. I take English at a low level but I have decent skills in the ways of understanding technique. I write poetry mainly as a release for feelings I build up...