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Thank you for the feedback.
Both sets of comments really helped to inform the edited version.
It is scary how obvious some weaknesses are once someone points them out!

Stealing Fruit (edit 1) The oak at my back was a useless sentry. Pine circled like witnesses around casualties and undergrowth in chlorophyll robes curtained privacy for a crop crying out to be eaten, though mine to neither pick nor taste. Blushed skin, freckled with fine hair brushed my mouth, rel...

Hi madgirl. For me, few things beat originality and your poem has it in bucketloads :-) Ripen - Flaunt firm flesh; I loved these! Thinking literally and metaphorically, I think you could make this even stronger by switching the order slightly. For example, "Leave the green of youth behind"...

I love that so few lines span such a spectrum of human industry. With the suggested amendment from the previous crits this is a strong piece. For me, the only distraction is the word "brown". I think it's intended to complement "ground" but instead it battles with it. Factually c...

Hi all, I am a Scientist who has long been yearning to reconnect with his more creative side. A couple of months ago, I began work on some poems as a means of doing this. Recently, I have been increasingly keen to share, receive feedback on my work, and read and critique the work of others as a mean...