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I very much enjoyed this poem. I liked the sentiment and the 'voice' - i.e. the imagined narrator that it evoked for me. The overall rythm invites/compels me to another reading and I like the balance struck between the sad events of Turing's life and the greatness of his work. The only potential neg...

Thanks Caleb. This is a first draft, which I just slapped on the forum in the heat of the emotions which created it. Sometimes I'm not too sure what my creative process is and my poems are as much a surprise to me as to a reader seeing them for the first time. With this one I wasn't clear whether I ...

Saul, now that's more like it! Firstly I agree that the contradiction exists - but this is precisely why it was a challenge. I felt in a particular way about the subject and was interested by the challenge of stating it in this form. I recognise, of course, that no-one speaks Shakespearian English a...

Not entirely. I failed to appreciate, before, that the site was purely contemporary. However, I'm not that bothered about the poem - I hated it shortly after writing it yesterday. My 'Palestines!" comment was an attempt at a joke - intended to imply that I did not take the boos to heart (or the...

As I said previously, Saul, I now understand (despite the title) that the site is solely about contemporary verse. As far as telling me not to do it goes, I would direct you to Cam's response: "Do us all a favour, Frank, and cut the Shakespeare impersonations. Can't you do a nice modern poem ab...

Ah, gotcha! The site's all about contemporary hence the audience reaction! You have to admit though, the title 'Poetsgraves' is a tad misleading in this respect. Never mind, I've posted a contemporary (or at least as contemporary as a 40 something can post) so call off the damn dogs. N' the wine wos...

Of course, I recognise that this isn't to everyone's (anyones?) taste, but apart from slating me for the fact that I attempted it all, no-one has felt inclined to any technical deconstruction or appraisal of the poem. Truth be told, I don't like it myself - it's only my second attempt but probably m...

Wecome to Manilla The planet, not the town did you get on the wrong bus? This is the land of tick tock The Centre of Same We don't do artists here. But look on the bright side leave your silly colours ride up and down on our silver moving stairs and shop until you drop or pop the pretty pills You'll...

I've taken part in photo shoots as a model with pretty girls and this poem paints the picture excellently. I found I had an overwhelming urge to add a verse including the world 'earning' but have resisted. 'a talking prop/in tight tube top' particularly appealed to me - there's a chart song in here ...

Palestines! I'll have you know I'm a published poet. Even better - I've got a bottle of wine and you haven't so it's all ok.

I'm fascinated by Shakespeare and classical sonnets at the moment, so please excuse the deliberately archaic language and formal setting! Apologies, also, for my poetic gloominess! I'd be interested to hear from anyone else who likes to write in a similar style. Sonnet 2 Great River Time, thy torren...

I like the contemplative tone and the evocation and comparison of past loves. I like the sense of completeness, too. I'm an actor and familiar with the saying 'leave them wanting more', and you left me wanting more. But I don't think more is needed as you've managed to capture a sort of encapsulated...

Ha ha. No, it's not my style. I normally write in a modern style, or write humorous poetry. I deliberately set out to write a traditional sonnet in something close to the style Shakespeare used and keeping to the same metre. To be honest I was a bit surprised to succeed to the extent that I did. I'l...

Guilty as charged yer Honour.

Like beasts of burden pace we forth each day Each to his own task and mindless hours And barely pause to note that beautious ray Which falls from Heaven's Orb betwixt the showers Thus blind, o'er years, we tread beneath our soles A treasure to outshine our base desires Thence, return each night bere...