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Hi Camus
I have to say I really like this poem. Its short and sweet, very descriptive and brings to light the truth that most like to hide from in these kind of situations. It was a very interesting topic to write so beautifully about; I enjoyed reading it.

Passions from love now distant Lingering upon ruined lips Searing pain accompanies knowledge Love beyond reaching fingertips Storms rising from within The very sun taints the day Shining brightly a happy hue, Ignorant of love’s departed way A seeming life lost to suffering darkness Bittersweet the t...

They come to me at night Or sometimes in the day Love is in their words Love is what they say They tell of happiness and laughter They sing of emotions untamed Nights that will live on forever Passion expressed unashamed When I least expect it They creep right up on me Reminiscing about the good tim...

Hey SecondSun, I really liked this poem. It actually seems like something I would write except for I have a thing for poems that rhyme :D Anyway, the adjectives used were very....how to describe them? Just beautiful I guess. When I read this, images played through my mind like a movie. Very impressi...

I really liked the rhyming scheme in this poem though there were a few lines that seeme a little off. The emotion in the poem was pretty strong and I really liked the way you hinted at certain things but didn't actually come out and say them. Very good.

I think this poem is nicely written and paints it's point well. It does have an old-fashioned feel to it, but hey, if thats your style, keep it up!
Kaitlin

Thanks for the comments. This was definitely supposed to be an emotional poem and actually I didn't spend much time on it. It was just kind of there, in my head. I agree this poem is abstract and a little vague, but that is pretty much how I wanted it to sound. I kind of wanted to make the reader sp...

I will still be here When you finally realize That it is I who gently softens The truth of what you call lies Yet to be known to you I will still be here To calm your raging anger To dry every stinging tear When it is burning passion That fills your darkened soul I will still be here For you to brut...

Thanks for the comment. When I actually wrote this I didn't even noticed the predominance of the "o" sound in the first stanza. But I always read through my poems after writing them and I did notice the first of poem sounded particularly...strong I guess. Thanks again for the comment! Kait...

Dark was the night in which I wandered Darker still, the thoughts I pondered Searching for solace in ebony gloom The company I sought was shadow’s loom Yet night could soothe only momentary I fathomed all such good was temporary Pilfering my sanctuary, the sun such a thief Introducing once again all...

Thanks for your comment. This is one of my shortest poems. I plan on posting a few more but I like reviewing others as well. I have not read Coda but I will look into that. Thanks again.

Maybe I am wrong And there’s nothing for us here All was washed away with my every tear I have hope That all my love has not been spent I am honest but no longer innocent Yes, I am flawed But if you’d just look then you would see That there’s so much more to me ---Kaitlin Jones

Wow, I'm surprised this hasn't received any reviews yet! It was very good. I really like the way you keep with your rhyming scheme, it makes it very enjoyable to read! Keep up the good work!

Hey SecondSun,
That was a great poem. I love the way you used creative words to rhyme in each line. I also think your message was great, I totally agree with it. Great job.