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- Wed Apr 17, 2024 4:50 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 25
- Views: 200
Re: Favorite Songs
I just noticed the videos you posted, John, but I'm going to bed, so I'll listen to them later. In the mean time, here is Peter Gabriel's "Your Eyes". He has performed this song multiple times, and it is always a big production when he does. If you haven't heard it, I think you'll love it....
- Sun Apr 14, 2024 11:19 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
Thanks, Phil.
In my world, more is more. I know you don't see it that way. However, sometimes "more" is "too much". Finding the balance is the problem. Actually, I think I just improved it a bit.
In my world, more is more. I know you don't see it that way. However, sometimes "more" is "too much". Finding the balance is the problem. Actually, I think I just improved it a bit.
- Thu Apr 11, 2024 10:14 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
Version 4 posted, not as reduced as you all wanted, but slightly more concise.
- Sun Apr 07, 2024 10:48 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 65
Re: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
Thank you, John!
- Sun Apr 07, 2024 9:32 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Ghost-Meat
- Replies: 4
- Views: 79
Re: Ghost-Meat
I like this poem -- I really do. I have sat in so many Indian and Japanese restaurants wonder what it was that I was ordering that this is a moment right out of my own life -- and I think a lot of other readers will feel the same way. Oh, and it's nice to read a poem from you that isn't about God (n...
- Sun Apr 07, 2024 9:25 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tinnitus
- Replies: 7
- Views: 66
Re: Tinnitus
I like this! I definitely like it! So much subtlety and implied meaning!
- Sun Apr 07, 2024 9:22 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 65
Re: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
Everyone's favorite poem has just been revised!
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 11:17 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 65
Re: Saturday Afternoon
I must be tired. I don't really understand what you are saying. I'll come back later.
Yes, it's a poem. A poem is whatever an author says it is.
Yes, it's a poem. A poem is whatever an author says it is.
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 10:58 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Even Better than the Real Thing
- Replies: 6
- Views: 64
Re: Even Better than the Real Thing
Interesting poem. I like that it is based in the real world in a mundane situation.
But it needs more reading and I'm off to bed. I'll have more to say later.
But it needs more reading and I'm off to bed. I'll have more to say later.
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 10:56 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 65
Saturday Afternoon (version 2)
Saturday Afternoon (version 2) “Is that the Empire State Building you’ve got in your pants?” Well, I thought it was funny, and this was Greenwich Village, so there was at least a fifty percent chance he would laugh and, hopefully, stop to exchange numbers. But no — I wasn’t showing a big enough bui...
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 10:12 am
- Forum: Post Visual Art
- Topic: Untitled
- Replies: 9
- Views: 88
Re: Untitled
I question the logic of those old fables that have nothing to do with reality, but your poem is good, especially the first couple lines.
As the mountaineer reaches the summit,
the mountain disappears from under him.
Very deep!
As the mountaineer reaches the summit,
the mountain disappears from under him.
Very deep!
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 7:27 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 3)
Thank you for your suggestion, Tony, but I'm not going in that direction. As I said to Phil, I am going to cut some stuff out -- most specifically, the part about the coverlet going off and then coming back on, etc. That can be condensed. But the basic structure of the poem -- the trouble sleeping c...
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 7:22 am
- Forum: Post Visual Art
- Topic: Untitled
- Replies: 9
- Views: 88
Re: Untitled
Given that you write minimalist poetry with as few words as possible, I find myself wondering why your art isn't more minimalist or cutting edge. In my youth, I fell in love with a watercolor painting that was created with perhaps 7-10 brush strokes. It was part of an exhibit and I wasn't able to af...
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 12:40 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 3)
I agree, Phil. I tend to say too much. I love the sound of my own voice. On the other hand, I see myself as a narrative poet, and narratives aren't usually concise. I'll work on it, though I won't be cutting out THAT much. The part about getting comfortable in bed could be its own poem, and I see an...
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 10:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 3)
Now on to version 3.
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 10:35 am
- Forum: Post Visual Art
- Topic: Untitled
- Replies: 9
- Views: 88
Re: Untitled
You are an artist with a unique talent.
- Thu Apr 04, 2024 11:32 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 25
- Views: 200
Re: Favorite Songs
Yes, that's a great song. Black people have naturally resonant voices, and I like any song about being older. But right now I'm getting into Peter Gabriel. I think there's greater emotional depth in Gabriel's music than in your standard Motown hit. I'll be posting another of his songs soon. He's now...
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 11:05 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 25
- Views: 200
Re: Favorite Songs
I heard this song when I was young but never saw the video. It's quite amazing.
Peter Gabriel and Kate Bush. Wow.
Peter Gabriel and Kate Bush. Wow.
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 8:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 2)
New version, more lyrical.
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 12:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Moon in Other Countries
- Replies: 4
- Views: 68
Re: The Moon in Other Countries
I've looked at this poem several times, but wasn't sure I had anything to say. You have posted "travel" poems before -- indeed, you are good at making travel sound interesting. In this case, though, I don't find much that interests me, beyond the fact that you are writing with your signatu...
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 6:36 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius
Oh oh oh -- a feminine ending is one with an unstressed vowel at the end; I see. I was thinking in terms of muchacha and muchacho, etc.
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 9:45 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius
Thanks, John. I am working on making the poem more lyrical. I have already changed "Hades" to "Hell". Does English have feminine endings? Is "Hades" feminine? What I actually did at that time was I called the police and asked her if they shouldn't try to rescue the woma...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 7:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 217
Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4)
Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 -- slightly more concise) A big meal before bed turned my body into a steel-smelting blast-furnace producing prodigious amounts of heat. The covers were too hot, the covers were too cold; switching them in and out, it took an hour to find a balance. As I settled i...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 6:36 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Ancient.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 107
Re: Ancient.
I didn't care for it the first time I read it, but the second time I found it lovely. I have to ease my brain into modern poetic logic the way one eases into a hot tub that is too hot.
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 6:33 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: NAPO
- Replies: 12
- Views: 116
Re: NAPO
The point I'm trying to make is that I don't believe in chance. I'm old enough to remember when owning a good typewriter filled me with pride, my favorite being the Olivetti Praxis (which turned out to be terrible to type on because of its small keys, but it looked wonderful). Now -- never having le...