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First of all thanks for your patience and very detailed criticism. It pleases me a lot. In this post I ll concur with what you realized: there's indeed some incongruity with the 1st stanza (the one who presents the problem) and the others (specially those that sends us to the 1st "then I go bac...

Wow! I'm at work right, very busy lately. You deserve a better answer at weekends (and I'll definitely reply). Really pleased by all your comments.

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a stone goes through stained glass. the surrounding still life on its micro cosmos barely breaks the pipe dream made of thousand-year slumber within the smooth debris while shards of glass accuse in vain the integrity of yore; heavens and edens from the window edges arise from the never-spoken-fake ...

The Window Washer is the worst voyeur in the world. That is why this poem is very interesting from a conceptual point of view. Flaubert once said that it is essential to "write the mediocre well." Unlike rear window hitchcock's voyeur, the window washer is there, completely exposed, everyo...

Joining the etymologic aspect brought by NotQuiteSure, also vermin ('worm') also gave to latin root languages the color red ('vermicŭlus' / 'vermiglio' / 'vermelho'), which was made of pigment of those worms.

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Thanks I ll do the correction about the "with" and "of". Regarding the cliches they actually aren't. The arcane subject in Shakespeare work's can be found not infrequently on medieval astronomy which at that time was also close to medieval astrology. Equinox as we know is when th...

No, you can keep criticizing. I really liked your posts. Made me wonder and they were always pertinent. Thanks for your comment.

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it's so easy to get carried away and why we shouldn't? what is so essential about to remain steady? which cycle doesn't lose the course from its source and which river doesn't simply disappears on its pale remembrance, aside all lives in stand by as if arise by weak force? who said that to be or not...

I liked how you solved the poem's whereabouts by using " to the center / of these recollections. " because as the poem goes you voluntarily seem to not get too much attached, but at the same time you don't want to seem removed -- the state of contemplation while living the moment. It's alw...

I loved the imagery from "Bosphorous awaken", this verse seems to abridge a whole poem itself.

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Thanks Jules. I'm sorry for delay the answer to your post. I was very busy this week. Interesting that I personally met Margaret Atwood in my country. She and others poets founded an important literary festival (FLIP / Paraty) where my parents live and I go every year. At that time she spoke exactly...

Interesting post (+ link) Mac. Tha'ts why I'm posting here on beginners section. Now I understood what you spoke of. Some details and peculiarities are lost for those who aren't native speakers and obviously won't sound so well on native eyes/ears. I presume this is one of this moments. The "a&...

I will respectfully disagree with you Mac. The outcome of prosaic and poetic mindset are completly different. Must be. If use prosaically any symbol (syn + ballein) you must establishes space and time (even when you choose to conceal them as 20th century writers often did - James Joyce, Marcel Prous...

Peter Schlemihl's Miraculous Story by Adelbert von Chamisso A story about a man who sold his shadow to the devil for endless fortune. The book has many plot twists and one appealing philosophical end. Most people say it's a children's book. It's not. Most children's books have a strong moral messag...

Ty for the comments. Ops it was indeed a typo. Thanks again (bad habit of writing at night it's the cause of this sloppiness). about the break lines they are not random. It was on purpose. I wanted them in that way to break the physiological/logical componentes of speech (phonation, resonance, fluen...

beyond all those hilltops something happened as it always seems: an afterglow brought clear skies and open seas, while the sunset would align with the random set of imaginary lovers which by whim and oversight barely did what they're supposed to. kisses and promises were aimlessly given while the cl...

I probably can't relate with all political peculiarities that both were talking about in USA but I can do that making a not very strict generalization. After all what's is a politician? We usually speak about all the trades of lawmaking (industry, finnance, lobby, media-public opinion, military, the...

Perhaps it's not entirely accurate to say neologism but maybe a revival (and fusion) of classical terms within the US countryside context: "lugubriously", "hincty", "lackadaddy", "Blah-blahed somewhat", "dingledodies", "Saroyan's town" and ...

Hi Poet, Perry and Barret. Thank your for your comments first. About the "I question the question mark at the end of S1 and I'm not sure about S2 L1, should that be 'he'll sight the same sight' or 'he'll sigh at the same sight'?" it's indeed " he'll sigh" so thanks for the gramma...

then one man will pursue the sea to be drowned by his small span. he'll dissect and persecute depths, obsessed with whales and abysses, hoping to find the X of cartesian charts or reach the apex through his overcast antithesis of moon eclipses and its inherent ellipses or would be ellipsis, these ra...

Strangely I liked more the first draft (V1), more elliptical. The last verse " the prey limp in the hunter's jaws" remebered in some sense the Songs of Innocence and Experience of William Blake -- the verse separated from the other stanzas gives a feeling of cutting.

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The beat generation not only did contribute to the expansion of slang, it gave an always fresh discursive trait. Of course, Rap achieved this but sectorized in each neighborhood (East-West Coast). It became a way of life farther beyond bohemian (or gypsy) behaviors. When Holywood absorbs it would be...

Actually this is my poem which I translated. I'm brazilian with spanish father. Glad that you liked the zeitgeist pace. It's the result of post electoral campaign here on Brazil -- so the vertigo was almost a prerequisite. Regarding the specificity of some translations I agree with Henri Meschonnic,...

The poem has a strong chronicle quality and invite us from the begining to travel to somewhere and embrace art and politcs in a broader way. Politics and Art like our western founders did in Ancient Greece. Paco de Lucia probably top 5 contemporary guitar players had an important gypsy influence in ...

Hi Mac and Poet. Thank you both for the revision and comment respectively. I'm still figuring better ideas to some stanzas

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