Poetry Forum

i really love this poem and keep going back to re-read it. it is just perfectly written.

Perhaps should not be in the beginners section!

kidult

yo, On one hand I absolutely love this poem; it is concise, neat, clever and really well written. And I think it has a good sense of rhythm all the way through. I too, like oranggunung, am not too sure about the peter pan sentences at the end of verses. Although it adds to the flow, I am not sure ab...

LOST AND FOUND by Kidult The tracks scurried past me, where I had slipped away by fickle fortuity. I sat there grinning quite stupidly, in my deluded delight, thinking he was gone forever. That night, chaos stopped and relief sat down beside me, and very gently laid its hands on my face. But in the ...

Hey again, I think it is quite funny that I got two quite opposing criticism about the poem. I think what I was trying to do was just show that kind of internal conflict with one’s self. On one hand I do want to be this pretty thing, but cannot stop the feelings of my true self, perhaps a little kin...

Yo all, Thank you for your comments. Basically, the poem is quite personal. It is about living under certain cultural and family expectations/values to be a certain way. i.e dainty, pretty, innocent etc. To clarify, the poem is about the guilt felt having sexual fantasies. I must have revised the po...

hey, reading the poem, it is obvious that you are a good writer....it is concise and clear and the words seem to flow nicely. but i think the subject matter and what you are saying is kind of dull. (sorry if that sounds harsh). i am no expert, but i think that the poem just lacks depth and true expr...

i agree that the poem in itself is quite simple, but for some reason the middle paragraph really wks for me. "trailing away, what I have seen, what I have done and who I have been... " i don't think it is a great poem, but i do i think it comes from some really genuine feelings. and if any...

THE TREMBLING ROSE By Kidult I weep, I swoon, I torture myself, I am the trembling rose in the palm of your hand, I only want to kiss your lips. But whilst I am elegance and beauty, And I have the splendour of India spread before me, What I really want is for you to come inside, and then out. And th...

yo all, i've randomly came across this site and it has quicly become one of my favourites. i've just recently started dabbling with poetry and i think this is a good way to get work criticised/complimented, and yet stay completely anonymous. sigh...the cyber world ....it continuously astounds me!!! ...