Poetry Forum

Arcade Fire are great! Great music and great lyrics, most of the time. I can't believe anyone thinks Doves are better :lol: The vocals in Arcade Fire are sung with passion, whereas Doves sounds like they're bored. I don't understand why their better vocalist doesn't sing much either :? Doves are sti...

I like both of the drafts in different ways. I think with a bit work, and using some of the advice already given to you, you're almost onto a very good poem. I don't quite understand it and the transition from literal halfway through (is that right?) is a bit confusing, but it's very enjoyable to re...

I liked most of it, but the last line just stood out as being particularly bad. I was enjoying it up until the very end where it seems to change tone, in a bad way. But overall, quite good.

Wabznasm covered some of the things I was going to say about this, so all I'll say is that this is a great poem However, I do think that the title is a bit of a letdown. It feels a bit too 'cliched' (I know it's not too common though). Besides that, very good!

I'm new, just thought I'd say hello to everyone. So... hello