Poetry Forum

The twee-ness might make more sense after reading this: http://www.luminarium.org/sevenlit/marvell/bermudas.htm

Or then again, it might not.

I like this a lot, but have to admit that the first, and last two lines, seem unrelated to the rest.

I drop the first line, and work on the last two. Why is an ant like poetry in a poem? Looking forward to the answer...

Full heavy fruit on every tree. The piping of a kiskadee. A generous sun pours down on us, its light caress on hibiscus that out of every rock and stone seems to have pushed, and bloomed, and grown. The coral sand, so soft and hot, this is the pleasure we have sought and travelled all these miles to...

This raises that whole can of worms of how to deal with pop/consumer culture references. Ignoring them can be artificial given tv/movies/video games/rock/rap etc are how we express ourselves as a society. If you use them it seems to drag everything down, and pin your poem to a moment in time, doomin...

Please tell me that this is a thinly vieled attack against a particular person! There's a wonderfully long tradition of poets dissing other poets in verse, and tradition must needs be respected.

Report From Open Mic Poetry Night The first Suffers from Poetry Voice. Peers out, Chin tucked to chest. Intones, Meaningful and glum, Low and lu Gu Bri Ous, With pauses On the important Words. Number two Is furious with Her mother. But thinks it wouldn’t Be poetic To say so in so Many words. Three ...

Compressing her trust into
Downloadable jpeg shame.

???

It's a thought.

I really like the first stanza. It's very immediate -- something undisclosed has just happened. But the immediacy the reader feels is the desire and frustration of the narrator. This is reinforced by the language, nothing fancy to get in the way of the reader's being pulled along. Nice choice of ver...