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- Thu Aug 09, 2007 7:33 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Addressing My Demons
- Replies: 2
- Views: 891
Re: Addressing My Demons
Wow. Something powerful going on here I think. The first five lines reeled me in, although I didn't see why there were quotation marks round 'oxygen of happiness'. Maybe I'm missing something? I thought 'The lights are on but no one's answering' perhaps a variation on something of a cliche theme. I'...
- Thu Aug 09, 2007 7:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Bridge
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1370
Re: The Bridge
Thanks very much for the comments. I've never heard of The Sundering Flood; I've just Googled it. Sounds interesting. Barrie, your point about equal opportunities made me laugh! This was written about a real person, and the 'dark skin, dark hair, crimson dress' line was intensely personal, but I do ...
- Wed Aug 08, 2007 10:25 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Bridge
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1370
The Bridge
The Bridge The river headed for the sea Growling slowly through the town The foreign banks, so far apart Neither to the other known The current coursed, the undertow Resisted hard the great North Sea No ferryman to pull across No strength to swim across to me She lingered on the other side Dark ski...
- Wed Aug 08, 2007 10:21 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Google Me
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1229
Re: Google Me
I loved it. Intriguing title, great use of juxtaposition of the old (chiselling) and new (googling). Are the last two lines - which are great - directing the reader to the futility of life? I thought that there was more humour in it than despair or resignation. Hope I'm right.
Kerri x
Kerri x
- Mon Jul 23, 2007 8:14 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Flower Child
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2871
Re: Flower Child
Hi, What an intriguing piece of writing. It contains some fantastic lines; "Let you rise, red ball, I cannot stop you", "first-shot wives", etc. Really nice phrases to get your tongue around. I found the pop music references in the "Sweet Dreams" verse interesting; I wo...
- Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:24 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Just saying hello
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2269
- Fri Jul 06, 2007 9:32 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Aging Fleet of Half-Moon Bay
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1290
Hi, this is my first ever critique, so please bear with me. I enjoyed this. It seems designed to be read out loud, which always works well for me. I appreciated the rhythm and the title, The Ageing Fleet of Half Moon Bay, is evocative. I wonder if there is such a place as Half Moon Bay; the poem mad...
- Fri Jul 06, 2007 9:10 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Just saying hello
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2269
Just saying hello
Hi,
I stumbled across this excellent site a couple of days ago whilst tentatively looking for a safe place to post a couple of the poems I have just started writing again after a gap of some years. I look forward to participating and to getting to know a few people.
Kerri
I stumbled across this excellent site a couple of days ago whilst tentatively looking for a safe place to post a couple of the poems I have just started writing again after a gap of some years. I look forward to participating and to getting to know a few people.
Kerri