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- Wed Feb 14, 2007 2:17 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: As idle as a painted ship.....the forum becalmed......Again
- Replies: 54
- Views: 13310
- Tue Feb 13, 2007 7:19 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: As idle as a painted ship.....the forum becalmed......Again
- Replies: 54
- Views: 13310
- Tue Feb 13, 2007 4:19 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: As idle as a painted ship.....the forum becalmed......Again
- Replies: 54
- Views: 13310
Well, I'm fairly new to this website despite the start date. I only really got involved a few months ago. I agree that it has seemed very quiet recently. It is hard to write critiques, and I don't think I've ever written a long in-depth one myself. I think this is due to feeling slightly inadequate ...
- Tue Feb 13, 2007 9:11 am
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6642
Yes David, ironically enough for someone criticising prose you did a good job of expressing yourself badly. :lol: Don't worry, I agreed with what you were saying I just felt a bit patronised. You're welcome to comment on my posts it's useful even when the person dislikes your work. Sorry if I got a ...
- Mon Feb 12, 2007 7:27 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6642
Spencer, I hate to be the spectre at the feast but there's no point in not saying this: I think it's really hard to write good prose, and this is not good prose. That may just be subjective, but I think it's over-written. There's too much of you in it, commenting, moralising, pontificating. If you ...
- Mon Feb 12, 2007 7:10 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Attention poets!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2479
- Wed Feb 07, 2007 3:41 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Attention poets!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2479
Attention poets!
The mundane 9-5 has finally taken it's toll and I've decided to focus on something more creative. So I'm setting up my own E-zine. So far there is only a myspace which is http://www.myspace.com/holeintheroad but my whizz of a web developer boyfriend will be making me a shiny new website. So if any o...
- Wed Feb 07, 2007 1:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Unlucky (contains swearing)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1837
- Wed Feb 07, 2007 9:22 am
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6642
Anyway, let's not hijack the post - I'd like to see it expanded upon. There would seem to be a lot of thought and reflection that never came out, leaving the piece a little too brief. There's a lot of interesting stuff still waiting to be revealed, methinks. Well I did post the longer version a whi...
- Tue Feb 06, 2007 5:00 pm
- Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
- Topic: Litzines/Ezines
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2587
Haha nice names. But I decided on 'Hole in the Road' (I'm going with a Sheffield theme).
The myspace page is now up and running, but the website isn't yet.
http://www.myspace.com/holeintheroad
add me if anyone is on here!
The myspace page is now up and running, but the website isn't yet.
http://www.myspace.com/holeintheroad
add me if anyone is on here!
- Mon Feb 05, 2007 9:29 am
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6642
Cheers love. Darn it there I go again! Yeh I wrote it about a year ago whilst still at uni and I don't think I'd had the full on yorkshire accent experience at this point. I did get my native Sheffield boyfriend to read it over and he said it was fine. I see your point though, I might take it out. P...
- Sat Feb 03, 2007 11:01 am
- Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
- Topic: Litzines/Ezines
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2587
Litzines/Ezines
Hi, I wasn't too sure about which section of the forum to post this in but I'm thinking about setting up my own E-zine with (hopefully)submissions of poetry, prose, art and photography. Do any of you guys use a litzne or ezine? I'd like to have a look around and see how others have approached it. It...
- Tue Jan 30, 2007 11:10 am
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6642
The Conveyer Belt (Revised)
I never noticed it before but sitting on a train is a little like being stuck on a conveyer belt. The train chundles past the scenery without caring to slow down for you to see it clearly. One big green and grey blur; cities, fields, trees. They all merge together like the painting of a two year old...
- Tue Jan 30, 2007 11:01 am
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Another opening: Opposite
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2931
- Fri Jan 26, 2007 3:29 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Another opening: Opposite
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2931
There is coldness set in the stolid, far-away expression which adds to my apprehension. But you look deeper and melancholy green eyes reveal a softer side than you get with the average ice-maiden. Curiosity is taking over and I have to hedge my bets. I feel my back stiffen as I walk, my steps falter...
- Fri Jan 26, 2007 3:26 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Another opening: Opposite
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2931
Haha! I've written the rest. I know it's slow but I think it's a builder rather than full of twists and turns. Perhaps that's not the correct way to write a short story but it's what came out of my pen at that moment. I'll post the rest but it's a bit long. I just didn't want to post it all and then...
- Thu Jan 25, 2007 3:32 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello everyone
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2926
- Thu Jan 25, 2007 2:42 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Manicman
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2630
- Thu Jan 25, 2007 12:55 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Another opening: Opposite
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2931
Another opening: Opposite
“Can I get you anything?” The voice floated softly into my consciousness, gently nudging the lazy cognitions of my mind back into action. I raised my sleepy eye-lids to the direction of the soft susserations, to see pretty brown eyes and benign white teeth smiling down. I returned her smile, a littl...
- Thu Jan 25, 2007 11:22 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Manicman
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2630
Re: Manicman
All is calm and peaceful, I wait, he lingers, I walk from room to room, Unsettled i get out the duster, I begin to clean with speed, Aware he waits to come, Ever reaching grasp of unseen powerful fingers, My mind begins to race, Nervous apprehension, I stomp with speed and dust my way, Slam without...
- Thu Jan 25, 2007 11:09 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Bridle
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1388
Thanks Geoff, I changed the unimpressed brow in the end. I submitted it to a competition and the version I used was: The Bridle I run my fingers down bumps, bends and buckles. It twists and turns joining metal and leather into one. The coiled up contraption is heavy to lift. I can still hear her boo...
- Wed Jan 24, 2007 4:52 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Mister Crocodile
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2954
- Tue Jan 23, 2007 11:08 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Beardless Harry
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4728
- Tue Jan 23, 2007 10:11 pm
- Forum: Post Some Prose
- Topic: Opening to a short story
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3183
- Tue Jan 23, 2007 9:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Bridle
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1388
Cheers minstrel. I've actually just been touching it up a little. Here is a revised version: I run my fingers down bumps, bends and buckles. It twists and turns joining metal and leather into one. The coiled up contraption is heavy to lift. I can still hear her boots clomp along the concrete. The wa...