Poetry Forum

Hi Camus all is well thanks hope to get chance to comment on some poems on here and try and do one myself.

I like this one but then again it has been a while since i have commented or attempted to write any poetry, However from memory i always did enjoy some of your poems Camus . you drifted away, lost yourself purposely Liked that bit sort of lonely feeling when reading it. a loner, a mismatched heretic...

Living, dying, life is a razor blade edge, balancing when you slip it cuts right through the flesh, each tear shared by a leak from the eye. He who is all and was the world cursed us all, angel humour is eternal and vast, only all evil has descended and taken the fall, echoes of rebellion against th...

Anyone like Jaz

Anyway download two tracks if you have not heard them,Great lyrics.

They are A Case Of You. And Clouds.

Two of my favorite tracks.. Joni Mitchell..

Tom.

Later on this week I decided to stroll back the years, have a pint in the local, just to see how things had changed.. ‘My God!’ someone said, ‘You’re looking old.’ ‘Pale too,’ said another, ‘you look like you’ve just seen a decade.’ I told my tale to open mouths and closed ears. With more beers, wi...

Just making sure you were on your toes Bombadil

Tom...

[quote="pseud"]Tom I thought we were friends?

Then you had to go and be a Yankees fan...

LOL sorry about that Pseud i dont even like american football LOL.

I just like the hat

Who do you like then Pseud

Tom..

Ok then click on the link and you should see some photos of myself and the wife of course.The idiot with the mask on is me .

Ok as usual click on the piccis to enlarge.

http://photobucket.com/albums/e19/runic ... ddtype=web

Tom.

great piccis everyone it's really good to put a face to the name.

Its funny what pictures you get of someone in your mind, really good to meet everyone..

Will try ang get a picci up of me sometime to add to the collection

Tom.

Once again i think this airborne Rhyming machine is present again. Example: aren’t the real deal— or they’d still be here.. I wonder if this was done with intent :?: Its a good poem very fast lane; Excuse the pun. I have nothing against rhyme i have merely noticed it occuring more than usual within ...

Cameron wrote: liked the rhyme - but it does seem to crop up rather randomly.. Does this mean Cameron that rhyme is perhaps growing on you :?: Or is Rhyme just becoming modern :?: i.e. modern up to date poetry,is rhyme accepted i wonder? Not that i'm picking mind you it's just that i always receive...

Hi Sanbanx i maybe not one to critique but with saying that i enjoyed this poem. Maybe the beauty of the day sentance could be changed (only a thought). Gilding rows of corn in gold. Pouring russet shadows beneath nodding, sleepy willows[/b I like the highlighted section above reminds me of a sunday...

I agree with Bombadil on this one I think a very valid point has been mentioned,And that is and i quote "a critique of a poem is not a critique of the author". I have wrote a few poems on here and a MAJORITY of them have been criticised to near death :lol: but i digress and continue to do ...

I like it think it read and flowed well.

Title who knows?.How about Times Scars....

Good piece Yesterday..

Tom...

Theres no excuse for the punctuation i know that,my only excuse is that i'm crap at punctuation Thanks again Kris i don't mind negativity at lesast your honest...

Right im off to drown me sorrows Only kidding one to work on i suppose....

Cheers Tom..

Cheers Kris....I quite liked the titanic metaphor though

back to the drawing board then respect for your honesty Kris...

Tom..

Any critique on this one then feel free to disect.

Bombadil wrote:Of course I hear voices, dear boy. I'm not deaf.

Why of course i meant in yout head

Is very good cleverly confusing and addictive nice piece.
especially liked these lines.

………….And just how will you stop? Kill me? Yourself? You’re
not important enough for suicide. Never will be. (Maybe someday

Do you hear voices though Bombadil... (only kidding)

Thomas.

Mundane traffic with dirty lenses gazing at me; Casually looking to my right, The aura of the same un- organised selection of toilet rolls stay sat on the market, soaked wood which maybe, i think may of blown nice as a tree once.. Who Knows ? "Four for a pound" muffles through the rain and...

Nice one Camus nearly as good as mine

All jokes aside a good piece yet again you should be banned
only kidding well entered Camus should be a winner...

Tom.

Cheers Cam i should of known better really.

Anyway i have edited it now seems fine.

Tom.

Christmas Thinker Think of times embrace those memories Christmas arrives bringing the aroma of Turkey and finest wine our cherished day Not forgetting one stroke of the festive fall. Plenty of presents and delicious food for all With stomachs full and stuffed no room for More, we sit back and relax...

V-Fur never heard of you before at least i can't remember you anyway,There are good heated debates on here from time to time and the Moderators on here (in their spare time un-paid i may add)Do i think a good job, their all fair and tolerant in my opinion. Swearing and kicking out like you have just...

Hi Rachel Italian !!!! struggle reading it in english

don't understand Italian ..

cheers Tom.x