Poetry Forum

I would have enjoyed further reading/descriptions of this fall into insanity. The description of the ward and its patients. Their mental state too. The political illustration too could have been expanded on one certain instance. There are more comments but not willing to post them at this tiring mom...

How realistic was this play? And is it true?

Another interesting read.

I don’t understand this form of writing spacing. It is in the least most confusing. Perhaps it is a spacing error with the RETURN/ENTER button? Did you intend… When I’ve done a ride the route is fixed in my mind; except I’ve got a photographic memory or something like that, or maybe a brain like a p...

I am not certain what this submission is but I will start here… The spacing is off. You could have described in more detail what the city has to offer. What details made the town so dull? What was this “humdrum administration job?” Why is this holiday so important? Where is this holiday destination?...

Sat in the dark watching gunmetal skies through a dirty window, this house is all empty and I feel the same. Robbed entirely of its purpose, the clock flashes on-off, on-off, telling the wrong time no-one at all, tick tock, talk to myself; here I sit surrounded by beloved black plastic, …. …;each h...

This is a very short, short story/excerpt of something bigger I think. So why is there quotations marks?

I think too many “She.” So why not try…

She had been warned, blew off the caution and lost her chance.

A fascinating beginning to something greater I believe.

Should it not be Glovers’ Hill? Or Glover’s Hill? Not at all an expert in writing plays but why not look to William Shakespeare? http://shakespeare.mit.edu/works.html At least the form. You would remove the (: and the “/”). You need a punctuation at the end of your sentences… The Rover: “Just piss ...

The first negative, the spacing. There needs to be spaces between the paragraphs and individual sentences. A second negative, “untuneful” this is not an actual word. Why not choose another instead of changing the original? The word “focused” has only one s, I believe. I enjoyed the full story but wi...

What an exceptional submission. Truly a thought provoking/contemplating post. The second question mark is not necessary. Instead of repetition “hope,” why not state “it?”… Hope-the last resort of every living being, what would any one do without it? People go to extremes to ensure/secure the surviva...

You are missing some spacing between the first five paragraphs. To destroy a man’s reputation, his friendships, his only support network if he had no family to fall back on, surely that would be an unforgivable act of cruelty that would threaten his mental stability. Knowing how gullible men can be ...

I believe you mean…I walk past a work colleague who I know… And not I walk past a works colleague who I know… An interesting expression of fascinating thoughts. The thoughts of a junkie. There were some verb issues I have but I think them irrelevant because what user would use common sense to expres...

The first positive, the title is very catching.

The first negative, the only negative is the spacing between the paragraphs. You need space between each paragraph.

What a very intriguing story. The action was well developed and expressed the conclusion was most surprising. I enjoyed it very much.

I enjoyed this much but found it was a mind full. Too many ideas/imagery forced into one compacted poem. You were so beautiful, but at that time, so was I: Originally…but, at that time, so was I: Was the second comma necessary to separate the idea presented? Also is a comma necessary here… I smiled ...

Wow! What an intriguing submission. I have read through a few of the comments/suggestions of other writers to this site and must side with those who state that some punctuation is not harmful to poetry. Neither is the correct spelling. I realize that I am very, very new to the site but you contradic...

Hello, I am Rena Hands. I am 27 year of age and I love to write. I enjoy reading but am more inspired to write by my own thoughts. I have been writing for about two years. I write what I know. I write about my adoptive alcoholic mother and about my ex-husband. Occasionally I write short stories also...