Poetry Forum

Maybe I should turn it into an Ode

That's what I thought. More of an ode than an apology.

Cheers
Kris

T, After the second line I would hyphenate it instead of ending it with a full stop, then it would show you're basically unpacking the first two lines. Yes, that would work. Chatgpt pretends to give a shit. We don't. Ha. You're right of course, it's an ego stroking exercise, I've not yet asked it wh...

I've been experimenting with Chatgpt, this was their/its/his/hers/thems reply to the poem, may save you all some time! Your poem, "A Day in a Life," captures a poignant and introspective snapshot of daily existence, contrasting the simple act of rising each morning with the lives of those ...

Friday night poetry fun time! I can’t help but reflect on the people I witnessed whilst working for the YEB. Ah the glory days of the Yorkshire Electricity Board. I was a meter reader for a year or so, totally crap at the job, had no inclination to meet my ‘targets’ but it did give me time to reflec...

As for the poem, what I try to do when writing about my problems is to acknowledge them objectively without self-pity, but apparently I am failing at that.

Yes you fail brilliantly.

Caleb, I think it's a poem that congregates all your usual styles: The minutiae of life, the self-pitying, the longing, but with an added urgency, whether that be because of the stricter rhyme scheme, I'm not sure? But for me it's a much more accessible and enjoyable read than your usual poems. Also...

Thank yawl kindly. T I like it but i don't know why i like it. That's cool and my default position on poems I like. I find it much easier reasoning why I dislike poems, which doesn't make for a good critter, only a disagreeable one! Mac, Yes, dissimulating was very handy in this instance. death row ...

Good idea for a poem, well put together. Especially enjoyed the Stevie Smith reference and the Catholic or careless, well all of it really. Does the following require some punctuation? which states, I’m a Socialist, Aston Villa supporter and faithful husband. Life has been a disappointment. which st...

he writes of forgotten things. a raincoat left, sodden, on a bus seat. A bike, well loved, one wheel chained to an underpass a birthday card to Daryl on death row, unsent. the wilting aspidistra in the bay sash window and now, he writes about you on your childhood swing, your sinewy tanned arms and ...

Just spent the weekend circumnavigating our wonderful rail transport network. There was a landslide, a bus replacement service, 2 cancellations, and 3 hrs late each way, but we got there and back! If you need to be anywhere on actual time, you're fucked, but if time is not of the essence, all good. ...

This week I have mostly been listening to a Lou Reed tribute album, here is a fine cover of Coney Island Baby:

On first read I thought the alliteration somewhat excessive, but no, once read as a whole it slips and slides wonderfully. Loved the ending: she whispers to me in italics the world will not stay straight. Could be seen as gently humorous, or have darker connotations? Anyhow a fine return, good to se...

Thanks Mac. and I nearly got kicked off for telling the tutor so. Well played sir! I think many of these so called 'courses' are box ticking exercises to get bums on seats and money in the coffers, and ultimately pointless. A shame for those attending who really want to progress with their writing. ...

We agreed to attend the writing course together; of course I knew you wouldn’t appear. ‘I’ll make my own way there’ was a sentence bound in fatality, a lonely sentence. I acquiesced; possessed as I was in the belief that we two may change the world with pith and pen, me almost present - you as Mr Be...

A fun poem "but somehow correct;" indeed. How the mind wanders to fantastical things! Love the use of 'liminal' a new word to forget. Once in Thailand I came across such a menu, note the: 'Chicken soup poignant' also a shout out for 'Fried Prok with Garlic Paper' https://closetpoet.co.uk/w...

Does anyone actually learn anything on this forum, or are we just sniping from our respective preconceptions of what constitutes poetry? A very good point. Harking back to the 'good old days' of this forum. I learnt so much initially on here. All the simple but arguably vital constituents of writin...

Yes, everyone's different.

It's accepting those differences that's the key!

A door opens and no one closes it. *OK. This say to me "THis is poetry." How does the door open? And if it's thanks to a person, which is typical, do you really need "no one" after? I'm not convinced you've thought through the logic of your sentence here. So there MUST be logic ...

I'll have to record an audio.

If you do, please record your own version of my favourite joke, it goes something like this, in fact it goes exactly like this:

What did the 0 say to the 8:

Nice belt.

I look forward to it.

You should hear me cracking jokes

Yes, that would be preferable.

Facetiousness really suits you John.

Cheers
Kris

and then drop the f bomb to express their somewhat tongue-tied limitations as commenters I'll take that on the nose, probably deserved! That said, I'm a huge fan of profanity. I find the snobbishness and pretensions in poetry almost unbearable sometimes, and certain poets do tend to take themselves...

This is the last poem in my MS.

Thank fuck.

i''ve no idea what "MS" means and I found it pretty impenetrable.

As you were.

Thanks guys.

I think you may be right about the punctuation. It seemed to make sense on the page, but when creating graphics, things change.

I'm updating my website and I'm finding creating images allows for much more flexibility in the structure and format, almost like cheating.

Cheers
Kris