Poetry Forum

I like the language you have used in this...it shows a story of a little fear , even cynicism in places...

I thought the structure was OK...very good effort.....

Oh yes – I like this very much..Very well written with a nice bit of intrigue and I think the language used is consistent throughout…gives a relaxed easy-going feel to the piece…

Maybe a follow-up would be nice…..but don’t want to shatter the dream….lol

Thanks for sharing….