Hi Ray,
Face another way is nice, thank you for the thought!
Thanks also for your take on the poem title. I think you're right, Objection is needlessly provocative and Response is more accurate really. A better title, I think.
Cheers,
John
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- Tue May 24, 2022 10:35 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
- Tue May 24, 2022 10:08 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: History of Madness No. 37
- Replies: 7
- Views: 936
Re: History of Madness No. 37
Hi Ray, I like this increasingly as I reread it. I think at first, I missed a fair bit of its subtlety - in the music, in the telling - and found it a bit garish, which I now think was mistaken. My first visit to a psych ward was in the 1990s and I've not seen someone taken out back for a dusting - ...
- Tue May 24, 2022 10:02 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
Re: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
Maybe "I cannot buy"? Then I get a rhyme as well!
Sidebar question: does this poem seem unnecessarily rude to the Dalai Lama at first reading, for whom I actually have the greatest respect? A good person. That I guess was my main workshopping question in posting it!
Cheers,
John
Sidebar question: does this poem seem unnecessarily rude to the Dalai Lama at first reading, for whom I actually have the greatest respect? A good person. That I guess was my main workshopping question in posting it!
Cheers,
John
- Tue May 24, 2022 9:58 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
Re: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
Hi Ray, I think interesting things happen if heart is traded out for self or soul here. Heart is nicely a physical object: you can bury it (at Wounded Knee), you can dash it to pieces. That's harder with a soul, and as in losing a soul, carries a lot of extra weight. Self OTOH feels maybe a bit ligh...
- Tue May 24, 2022 9:51 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
Re: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
Hi Ray, Thanks for your visit, and I'm glad you enjoyed the meditation! I know what you mean about my repetition of 'heart,' and thanks for suggesting self and soul as alternatives. Now, losing a soul and losing a heart are two different things! But maybe I can usefully vary what I've got. I'll give...
- Tue May 24, 2022 5:47 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
Re: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
Hi Phil, Felt the compulsion - I like it! Yes, my speaker has totally failed to arrive at the state of freedom from passion that Buddhism and the Dalai Lama recommend. Feel could certainly work there - we are rushing out the door but I shall ponder on our return! Cheers, and thanks for commenting, J...
- Tue May 24, 2022 4:28 am
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1418
Re: Hello!
Greetings, Fliss and Word-Bird!
And so, we meet again! Our paths are evidently fated to cross. I look forward to seeing you in a bit.
Cheers,
John
And so, we meet again! Our paths are evidently fated to cross. I look forward to seeing you in a bit.
Cheers,
John
- Tue May 24, 2022 4:25 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Hi Dad (rev 3 - St1 L3/4 tweaked again)
- Replies: 55
- Views: 5456
Re: Hi Dad (rev 3 - St1 L3/4 tweaked again)
Hi Eira, Thank you for your welcome! I'd missed that you've also lost your dad and am sorry for your double loss. That does make the poem and conversation all the more poignant and I wonder whether some tweak might make that more apparent to first-time readers such as myself. I'm not sure what thoug...
- Tue May 24, 2022 3:35 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1193
An Objection to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama
A Response to H.H. the 14th Dalai Lama I will dash my heart to pieces on the cliff of your indifference. I will bury it in your blue ocean. I will forever lose my heart in the forest that is you. I am not one of those who stand apart from passion – perhaps through choice, perhaps through destiny. I ...
- Mon May 23, 2022 9:40 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3616
- Views: 362393
Re: The Chain
Hi Macavity,
Thank you for that Slim Harpo number, and the Sandy Denny. Here if I'm lucky are Rita Hayworth and Fred Astaire doing a little dancing to Jackie Wilson:
Cheers,
John
Thank you for that Slim Harpo number, and the Sandy Denny. Here if I'm lucky are Rita Hayworth and Fred Astaire doing a little dancing to Jackie Wilson:
Cheers,
John
- Mon May 23, 2022 8:00 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Hi Dad (rev 3 - St1 L3/4 tweaked again)
- Replies: 55
- Views: 5456
Re: Hi Dad (rev 3 - St1 L3/4 tweaked again)
Hi Eira, I'm new to Prole Art Threat and exploring a bit as per the rules before posting myself. I read your poem (the latest version) with interest - I've lost both my parents, but remember the sort of conversation you are describing. I think this is a moving poem, and one thing that contributes to...
- Mon May 23, 2022 7:52 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: He dreams of castles (rev. 2)
- Replies: 32
- Views: 2629
Re: Hold the castles (rev.)
Hi Fliss, I realize I should say something more useful. For tbc, maybe "mother's hips"? They are I think primarily the hips of a mom here. And for "She's Sea-Queen," where I miss the article, how about ": a Sea-Queen"? I think that could work. No other suggestions reall...
- Mon May 23, 2022 7:45 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: He dreams of castles (rev. 2)
- Replies: 32
- Views: 2629
Re: Hold the castles (rev.)
Hi Fliss,
I continue to like both poem and title here. And ample hips is pretty much fine by me!
Cheers,
John
I continue to like both poem and title here. And ample hips is pretty much fine by me!
Cheers,
John
- Mon May 23, 2022 7:42 am
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1418
Re: Hello!
Thank you, Phil! I'll go ahead and have a go at posting then. I have a piece I'm working on just now.
Cheers,
John
Cheers,
John
- Mon May 23, 2022 1:13 am
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1418
Hello!
Hello, I'm John Isbell. I'm new to this forum (and a bit excited) but not new to poetry, I have lots of it. Is it any good, you ask? And that I can't answer, really. I spent some years as a language professor in the US before retiring last year, which leaves me more time to work on my verse. A frien...