Hi Phil,
It does feel familiar! I posted a different take on the same question a few months ago. I prefer this version, I am hoping it's more of a poem and less of a lecture than the original. It is in fact a new poem, and I've discarded the old one, for now at least.
Cheers,
John
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- Sat Apr 06, 2024 9:07 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Even Better than the Real Thing
- Replies: 6
- Views: 149
- Sat Apr 06, 2024 3:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tinnitus
- Replies: 7
- Views: 167
Re: Tinnitus
to the metallic?
An unexpected ending! Nice image as well, the N's former self bending over the rails.
Cheers,
John
An unexpected ending! Nice image as well, the N's former self bending over the rails.
Cheers,
John
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 9:51 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Even Better than the Real Thing
- Replies: 6
- Views: 149
Even Better than the Real Thing
Even Better than the Real Thing I who once featured in a fashion show have little truck with fashion now. The call that I should favor Pepsi over Coke, in drinking, does not pique my interest – it leaves me cold. My trousers too, have they grown narrow as they ought? No, they have not. Or do I say t...
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 9:39 pm
- Forum: Post Visual Art
- Topic: Untitled
- Replies: 8
- Views: 253
Re: Untitled
I like it. Great eyes.
Cheers,
John
Cheers,
John
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 9:38 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 445
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 3)
Hi Caleb,
I agree, this could be trimmed a bit. The core of the poem is the shift from your discomfort to the memory of the homeless lady. It's good to keep her vivid.
Cheers,
John
I agree, this could be trimmed a bit. The core of the poem is the shift from your discomfort to the memory of the homeless lady. It's good to keep her vivid.
Cheers,
John
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 9:35 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 7:07 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Fri Apr 05, 2024 4:06 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 31
- Views: 524
Re: Favorite Songs
I tend to prefer black voices to white ones, by a fair margin, and harmony speaks to me. My fave Peter Gabriel song is I think Biko. I do wonder whether black Americans tend to be readier to express emotion than white Americans culturally, and this makes for truer singing. True about aging. It seems...
- Thu Apr 04, 2024 10:30 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Thu Apr 04, 2024 8:13 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
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- Views: 355049
- Thu Apr 04, 2024 12:13 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 31
- Views: 524
Re: Favorite Songs
It's a good song. My brother is a bigger fan of both of their music than I am, it's not really my scene.
Here's something I find more soulful:
Here's something I find more soulful:
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 10:34 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Moon in Other Countries
- Replies: 4
- Views: 125
Re: The Moon in Other Countries
Hi Caleb, I did this; I did that is I think a pretty good description of most poems in existence! But it's true, this poem wanders along in the way of my meandering pieces. I think that maps some of how the traveler or tourist wanders through the foreign land. It is impressionistic. Anyway, de gusti...
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 9:15 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 10:48 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 445
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius
Hi Caleb,
To me, "Last night was a special delivery from Hades" has a feminine ending. And yes, to me English has them.
I agree, a person shouldn't be forced into a shelter. But it lingers in the mind, as you note.
Cheers,
John
To me, "Last night was a special delivery from Hades" has a feminine ending. And yes, to me English has them.
I agree, a person shouldn't be forced into a shelter. But it lingers in the mind, as you note.
Cheers,
John
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 9:14 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 9:12 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Moon in Other Countries
- Replies: 4
- Views: 125
Re: The Moon in Other Countries
Thanks Phil! We leave Kyoto for Osaka tomorrow, then Seoul and back to Almaty.
Yoshiro-san told us he goes to the cemetery regularly to see the dead. But he hasn't seen them yet.
CHeers,
John
Yoshiro-san told us he goes to the cemetery regularly to see the dead. But he hasn't seen them yet.
CHeers,
John
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 9:10 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 445
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius
Hi Caleb, I was wondering about changing from Hades to Hell! It makes sense, but OTOH I think there's an argument form aking the entire poem have feminine endings, since you have a bunch of them and they seem to be working. I think the turn to the homeless lady works very well and gives the poem une...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 10:06 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: NAPO
- Replies: 12
- Views: 280
Re: NAPO
The infinite monkey theorem: https://www.theguardian.com/science/202 ... hakespeare.
And here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Infinite_monkey_theorem
Cheers,
John
And here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Infinite_monkey_theorem
Cheers,
John
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 3:57 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 3:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Moon in Other Countries
- Replies: 4
- Views: 125
The Moon in Other Countries
The Moon in Other Countries The bullet train from Osaka to Kyoto is decked in Hello Kitty gear. And come from South Korea over misty seas, we reached the mountains of Japan, inclined abruptly to the water line and green as though unpeopled. Clustered at their base, the islands’ townsfolk. All along ...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 12:14 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 12:09 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: NAPO
- Replies: 12
- Views: 280
Re: NAPO
It all depends what enough time means. Give the monkey infinite time and if it keeps tapping away, it will indeed write the complete works of Shakespeare. Infinite time is a long time, and that would then be enough time. But given a monkey's lifespan, one might assume that it would be long dead befo...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 11:46 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3615
- Views: 355049
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 11:30 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Bad Dream.
- Replies: 16
- Views: 412
Re: Bad Dream.
Weird, huh?
John
John
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 7:16 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Ancient.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 261