Poetry Forum

I like it, it doesn't need anything changed. The vivid imagery here is what matters. And 'blowing breath' seems kind of wrong, but it actually works nicely, no need to change it. Gets the reader thinking.

What a boring thread title, oh well.

Living in Sydney, just only recently got interested in poetry.

It was going well, it's nice, but the cuss words ruined it.

What are your thoughts on this poem? Celestial Love It happened upon a waning moon withered sentiment turned sepia. A fall of ravens & thine eyes reflected dark holt. Yonder came one, the sinister, chapé, the dexter stole the colour of thy love, Gules. I remember us, danced with Zephyr, as he ga...