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The poem is excellent; imagery, rhyme, rhythm and a story..all the good things! Here are a few items: 1) (sparks and smoke heaven’s hitch Hundred sixty tons of steel,) Should there be either a comma after "smoke" or an "s" on the end i.e "smokes"? 2) (through the wheel)...

Very well done.. Rather than decry the "sing-song" I will compliment you on the harmonious rhythm and lullaby effect of a summer's afternoon by a stone wall. Very good imagery. I was particularly intrigued by the use of capitals and punctuation. Interesting effect. I am a reader giving an ...

I like villanelles.
The only critique I had was "chi chi." Are those nonsensical sounds or is there a definition? That seemed to clang with elysian, estoile, and perjurious.
I liked this poem.
I am not an expert, only a reader stating an honest opinion.

The first verse and stanzas (to the words "street") are very good..imagery, rhyme, and meter These I would bring to your attention: In the line.."which could have gave light instead." I wondered if the verb shouldn't be "given" not "gave." The stanzas from the...