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The title was "the mushroom shaped skull". I have lost my copy and would appreciate if Dillingworth could mail it over to me if he still has it.

most happily, if a poem, with a stabilo bionic 0.5mm and on plain A4 paper. It has a nice consistency but without the somewhat refined aura of a pen so lets me write happily on a bus, bar or my living room. I must say for a poem my favourite tools of writing are these two as it has the tactile delic...

I am wondering do any of you good people have a person with whom you can share the awkward birthing process of poetic creation? At present I am writing something possibly gargantuan and to be honest at this stage of the process I almost need to enter a trance to embody the poem before I can then att...

Neglected and little studied yes, though not on the PG forum: http://www.poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=4225 The special issue looks fascinating, but the website isn't working for me. How much does it cost? I was merely posting verbatim, I appreciate greatly this board and have enj...

I do not get this sort of prose, perhaps its my fault but I tend to feel this sort of prose is a poem in saga form. Nothing is wrong with your sentences just the whole seems somewhat lacking. It reminds me of a student conversation developing an idea to its logical and absurd conclusion but as a pro...

In the past there was a man who was somewhat unwise in his of choice thoughts and in his choice of subsequent actions. This often had a detrimental effect on his situation and, at times, on those around him. However not as often as one would think, for though he was a most unfortunate fellow and som...

Most readers of Samuel Beckett are well acquainted with his plays and prose, but few, even among his greatest admirers, are aware that Becket was a considerable, stunningly original poet. For historical reasons, Beckett’s poetry has for a long time neglected, poorly edited, and little studied. The n...

You too experience a foot break? WOW me too!!! see my last post here...sorry will add comments tomorrow but I quite like it.

camus wrote:Each to their own of course.

I guess I'm "poopy" too, boo boo bedoo.

Are you serenading me with song?


Let me know when you read the road to freedom trilogy am curious as to your verdict.

Thanks for the sparse commentary. Its about me, and I wrote it whilst on codeine doing my best to retain my sanity and knowing that in a few weeks time I would have to avoid becoming James Stewart in "Rear Window". Would love to hear more from others as I think I like this flawed monster a...

Hey ark not arc is intentional, I like lame puns. And it is mean to tie in with the crumble from within and sepulchre idea I am trying to convey.

barrie wrote:It reminded me of Albert and the Lion without the rhyme (and the death).

Maybe use an article with Cola sky?


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I thought about that also but I think it works as is

I had to read your poem, its the best title ever. As for the poem I have nothing to say apart from I really, really liked it. I know this thread is meant to offer adult comment but you know I really cannot say anything bad. Nice read and thank you

Hi John, not read all of the comments about your poem BUT I have read your poem. For me its an odd mix of genre. I feel its faux modern at the start and then somewhat pastoral, and to be honest I do not like it for its too great a fracture in the poems voice. Perhaps its just the middle with "T...

Directions to healing "Keep foot above heart level" so I do, talons perched in mid air. My hands roam within their ark, harass all. "Drink plenty of fluids" so I try, but water nurtures only ennui, and my plaster bound facade crumbles within. "Take anti-inflammatories" ...

Sartre is poopy, his road to freedom trilogy is just a grind...

DavyRam wrote:Umm... edit in a fuller crit later, but for now - it's fair weather friend, unless you're deliberately using it with a different meaning.

It was my intent, need more development in that sense I agree but fare is my intended spelling...

Gidday I am not keen on Mrk1. It doesn't read as well as the original. coagulate healthily devote a fleeting memory These lines are a little stodgy and lose rhythm. coagulate healthily - doesn't make a lot of sense to me either. Your use of "fare" weather friend suggests overeating and th...

A little cliche at times for me. For example: Fare weather friend devote a fleeting memory These lines weigh the poem down a bit. Doesnt give it the zest that the other lines do and the title suggests :wink: :lol: It was quite a pleasant read though, i definitely think there's a very vibrant theme ...

Just replace me cut me out, your chest, my empty lies will make you cry, like no other. Fare weather friend we paid the toll the angelus rang and then the wake good night...night Are you sure about 'fare' ? Don't want to be rude, but such poems are quite common nowadays. 'Lies', 'cry', 'cut me' - s...

Free your poem from its cliche title, its a big weight for the words to carry

Original Just replace me cut me out, your chest, my empty lies will make you cry, like no other. Fare weather friend we paid the toll the angelus rang and then the wake good night...night Change Mrk1 Just replace me cut me out, coagulate healthily devote a fleeting memory Fare weather friend we paid...

Half read it, will read agian but its beautiful, made me homesick...
Read it three times now, I cant really fault it as a whole, sure little bits but fuck it. It works and works well. Thanks

David wrote:

lars3939 wrote:Nad=Above
Mou=my
Kniha=book

Yes pretty much an accurate translation, I hope. Haha

Cool. So how does it relate to the poem?

for me its the futility of reflection...its not one of the poems I looked at in detail before BUT it was one of the easier ones to translate, haha I am weak!

Nad=Above
Mou=my
Kniha=book

Yes pretty much an accurate translation, I hope. Haha