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- Thu Jul 06, 2017 8:09 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: I Heart Europe : Edge Territories of the Vernacular (V2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2910
Re: I Heart Europe : Edge Territories of the Vernacular (V2)
Sorry, not a clue!
- Wed Jul 05, 2017 4:04 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Epiphenomenal
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2529
Re: Epiphenomenal
This calls for a couple of lines in each verse to rhyme...
- Wed Jul 05, 2017 7:34 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Passing Through (ghazal) [revised]
- Replies: 15
- Views: 3998
Re: Passing Through (ghazal)
I like the last couplet a lot. I think perhaps alone is a hard word to use as the repeating one as its sense is pretty forthright and it's hard to do much new with it. Have you tried a ghazal using the rhyming pattern just before the repeating word? It adds a link between the couplets that otherwise...
- Mon Jul 03, 2017 1:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Other Luke's Gospel (v2b)
- Replies: 20
- Views: 4232
Re: The Other Luke's Gospel
Yes, very good. Perhaps try reading it out loud, to find the places where the rhythm doesn't flow quite as well as others? I like the way the ending neatly rounds it off.
Ros
Ros
- Mon Jul 03, 2017 12:56 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Snakeskin...David/Ray/Tristan/Other
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3431
Re: Snakeskin...David/Ray/Tristan/Other
Well done, all. PG takes over the world, slowly, slowly...
- Wed Jun 28, 2017 7:47 pm
- Forum: Any Other Business
- Topic: New Facebook group for PG!
- Replies: 3
- Views: 6541
New Facebook group for PG!
For those of a facebook persuasion, Seth has kindly created a new group
https://www.facebook.com/groups/453385751686917/
for general discussion, hilarity and promotion of the site. Please do join us!
https://www.facebook.com/groups/453385751686917/
for general discussion, hilarity and promotion of the site. Please do join us!
- Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Strange Instructions (V2)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2672
Re: Strange Instructions (V2)
I think I'm confusing loss of integrity with erosion of identity. Too much mud and not enough light. Thanks for your comments Ros. Julian Certainly erosion of identity fits much better with sickness/growing old. I can see this capturing that well, the sense of almost but not quite keeping a grip on...
- Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Eurococo?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1858
Re: Eurococo?
Bit lost on me, I'm afraid... can't work out who the danger men or the beta-burghers are. Or ants.
It feels like a good idea, though.
Ros
It feels like a good idea, though.
Ros
- Wed Jun 28, 2017 6:44 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Antiphon issue 21 live
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3510
Re: Antiphon issue 21 live
Preparing for the big football issue.Antcliff wrote:I hear Brian Clough has a new collection of sonnets coming out.David wrote:Jock Stein! No way! I haven't been so excited since Mac appeared in a mag along with J Milton.
- Wed Jun 28, 2017 1:22 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Antiphon issue 21 live
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3510
- Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:26 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Path, Mist
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3559
Re: Path, Mist
Scary image.
I don't get the last line at all?
Ros
I don't get the last line at all?
Ros
- Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:24 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Strange Instructions (V2)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2672
Re: Strange Instructions (V2)
I'm not sure what it is we're supposed to have done, or not done But then we did it, done, or rather not quite maybe, and why we're more likely to when sick or old. Is loss of integrity more likely then? Can't see why. I liked the who diy vibe, and this But then we did it, done, or rather not quite ...
- Tue Jun 27, 2017 1:19 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Horseshoe Crabs
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2248
Re: Horseshoe Crabs
The article was amazing, wasn't it? I'm not so convinced you can link the blue blood as a metaphor of aristocrats/peasants - who are the aristocrats? Those doing the draining, or the crabs, which have the blue blood? How does the blood help defeat the peasants? I feel it's stretching the idea too fa...
- Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:11 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Another review of Drawing a Diagram
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1472
Another review of Drawing a Diagram
Lovely review http://antiphon.org.uk/rb/?p=240 in The Interpreter's House. People are being very generous. If it persuades you to investigate a copy, this is the best route: http://antiphon.org.uk/rb/?p=148
Ros
Ros
- Thu Jun 15, 2017 3:30 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Rialto2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4999
Re: Rialto2
Time for that collection....
- Thu Jun 15, 2017 3:30 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Review of Drawing a Diagram
- Replies: 10
- Views: 5244
Re: Review of Drawing a Diagram
Thanks Seth! I've seen the Orbis one, but not The Interpreter's House yet, so that will be interesting.
Ros
Ros
- Wed Jun 14, 2017 7:46 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Rialto2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4999
Re: Rialto2
Well done Seth!
Never quite worked out what the Rialto is looking for, but you've nailed it!
Ros
Never quite worked out what the Rialto is looking for, but you've nailed it!
Ros
- Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:06 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
- Replies: 22
- Views: 6718
Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Thanks, Ian. I was keeping the repeats of matter on purpose to make the language flatter, but perhaps it isn't necessary. We seem to see dark matter mainly through gravitational effects, but I'm finding it hard to make that a metaphor. Will experiment with your changes.
Ros
Ros
- Sun Jun 11, 2017 8:22 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
- Replies: 22
- Views: 6718
Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
It's a thought, David. I agree it doesn't really fit in the poem, at least not without changing it too much. I'm still struggling with my dark matter, however.
Ros
Ros
- Sun Jun 11, 2017 3:28 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
- Replies: 22
- Views: 6718
Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Good thoughts, mac, thank you.
Ros
Ros
- Fri Jun 09, 2017 8:14 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Wabi-sabi
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2165
Wabi-sabi
imperfect, impermanent, incomplete No wonder at a universe imperfect, reinvented daily in each individual mind, each star sketched out by neurochemicals and glands, dark matter coloured in by grey and now, it would appear, manipulated by our gut bacteria. Why would a world influenced by fermenting ...
- Fri Jun 09, 2017 3:03 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Apologies
- Replies: 1
- Views: 7443
Re: Apologies
Hi Nicola,
Many thanks for getting it sorted!
Ros
Many thanks for getting it sorted!
Ros
- Fri Jun 09, 2017 2:59 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Good Things (2/3)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 3719
Re: Good Things (2/3)
I take it this follows on from (1/3)?
Intriguing, particularly the 'again'.
Ros
Intriguing, particularly the 'again'.
Ros
- Fri Jun 09, 2017 2:58 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Clear Skies (1/3)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3457
Re: Clear Skies (1/3)
I agree with the previous posters, the first two stanzas work well. You have a couple of comma splices in the second two, which I think make the rhythm a problem - I lied before, there is also the coldness of the water that mars the moment, and makes me remember. here I feel the first comma should e...
- Fri Jun 09, 2017 2:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
- Replies: 22
- Views: 6718
Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
It's always the middle bit! (unless it's the end bit). I wonder if I can get away with no middle bit? I think you're right, Julian, I've lost the feel of the original. I'm trying to keep it really simple, while not stretching the science too far.
Feynmann was great.
Ros
Feynmann was great.
Ros