Poetry Forum

Thanks, Tristan Aha, I had forgotten all about that hedgehog, the monohog! Gosh, not read any Berlin in years. I have read more by his sometime pupil Charles Taylor. Thanks, Mac "...but why hurry to ones demise?". Indeed. But there is time for the hedgehog to make a comeback. A few are out...

"A much shorter poem but more effective I think. And I slightly prefer the new title as it's more provocative." I'm not sure who it is that would be provoked. It feels a bit like a swipe at a strawman these days. It feels a bit like this poem? That is not Earth it is round Bring back the D...

Greetings, JJ I think I preferred "secretly" to "forever". "Forever" is possibly a bit overused in romantic contexts? Loved the cool/concupiscent fool. Would there be any loss if this bit were cut?... "that sent a flooding tide into my widening veins." After a...

Hello, Ross I liked it. I enjoyed the "anxious slights". Nice sounds overall. I did wonder whether "sudden" attached to "rush" was redundant. But then I changed my mind. Change of title? Perhaps having your title also as the closer slightly weakens the close? Best, Seth

In bed, lying in. I reached for her foot with my toe. But it felt oddly angled. As if a normal leg, starting in a normal place, extending normally, would not have a foot pointed in that way. "Is there something in the bed, my love?", I asked. Or intended to. But it came out as: "The C...

Not seen one for over three years. Declining rapidly, they say. But here it is, so unhurried, sniff-sniffing along the gravel path. It waves no rag. I like banners, the bright colours at the sports day, the big singsong of the old teams. But I love it more than any flag. ………… Greetings, all! Not bee...

Greetings, Lake

Lovely. You SO make me want to visit that little house.


Me

Super. The hill/mountain outlines are very nice. As is the cloud colouring. Lovely patch of sunlight on the water. You capture our world (up here) very well.

Applause.


Me

Very good. Very nice ending. Nothing to add to what others have said.

Except to wonder if there is an alternative to "strange"? I'm not sure what you add to a coif to make it strang(er)


Me

Greetings

I liked the "map of my unearthing". Not quite sure what it means in this context. Is the narrator in this intended to be a somewhat jaded news reporter?



Me

Greetings

It happens once in while: I rather prefer the title to the poem. You are in good company. I quite often like the titles of Wallace Stevens poems more than the poem.

Me

Great to see the ever excellent Antiphon back in action, Ros

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I have a couple of poems in the new edition of Northwords Now. Here...http://www.northwordsnow.co.uk/

Sorry I have not been around much of late folks. I intend to attend a little more, coming into the pub for Darts Night and such.

Wilko!

I'm not around much these days. But I am just calling by to say, with the others, that this is good stuff.

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Firebird wrote:Many thanks Seth. And congrats to Ray, too. Great poem Ray!

Cheers,

Tristan

Indeed!

David wrote:Oh hang on - "Keep poems alive". I get it. Previously published poems are her thing. A good thing.

Thanks, Silent! Happy Easter!

Thanks, David. Indeed, that is the idea of KPA. Or as The Average White Band sang, "Let's Go Round Again".

Seth

Lake! Splendido. How nice to see your art again.

Seth

Congrats to Tristan and Ray on appearing over at the Snakeskin 250th. Huzzah!

(250th? Good grief, I seem to recall I was in the 200th celebration. Can fifty months have passed?)


http://www.snakeskinpoetry.co.uk/

I have an old poem posted up today at Keep Poems Alive.

By the way, this site is worth considering folks. It is solely devoted to re-appearances (after three years) and is run by Sally Evans the editor over at Poetry Scotland.

https://keeppoemsalive.com/

Ha! Great idea. Having a go...


Full of cheap cantos,
multi-pack lunatic wards,
bargain narcissists.

'arms length away' is idiomatic and cliched but it works here, I think. I find the poem's language original I just don't have a clue what's being said, really. Perhaps more grounded imagery needed. Cheers, L Greetings, Silent. Nice to see you calling by. :D Has PC collapsed? I've not called by ther...

Big congratulations, JJ. Terrific to hear it went so well. Gonna be a happy strolling Summer I hope...you deserve it.

Seth

Ta, Silent and Luke

Thoughts always very welcome, but the ferry has sailed on this one.....it was posted last August and has since been published in the current "Europe" edition of Magma.

Seth

Yeh, I liked the Jenny Wren part as well.

Congrats, JJ

Good un, Mac!