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- Sun Oct 09, 2022 11:11 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Village Visiting Neighbors (version 4)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 998
Re: Taking a Bullet for the Cause (version 2)
Hi Celeb, All I can say is that I can understand why this must seem strange to you. We write such different poems and I think we are trying to do very different things in our poetry. So it’s probably not useful to compare our poems. A lot of my poems use implication and/or imagery, whereas yours are...
- Sun Oct 09, 2022 10:24 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Village Visiting Neighbors (version 4)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 998
Re: Taking a Bullet for the Cause (version 2)
Hi Celeb, like the fact that he's been a functioning adult for just a couple years and feels a little lost. I think this is a good idea. I think that a poem that only functions to make one point will probably be a failure. I also think a good poem should say many more things about it’s topic than ju...
- Sun Oct 09, 2022 5:33 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Village Visiting Neighbors (version 4)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 998
Re: Taking a Bullet for the Cause (version 2)
Hi Perry, I’m not sure there’s enough reflection on this experience and your loss for this poem to fully work for me - maybe the poem needs more specific details other than the foods and your gran making you fat, such as how the food is served, how the old lady talks, descriptions of her home/appear...
- Sun Oct 09, 2022 4:46 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
- Replies: 15
- Views: 993
Re: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
Hi Not, Many thanks. The series is up to ten smacking associated poems now. Six were published together in Fevers of the Mind (https://feversofthemind.com/2021/02/23/a-series-of-poems-about-smoking-by-tristan-moss/). Many thanks for your help with this poem. I seem to remember it was very much a tea...
- Sun Oct 09, 2022 4:42 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
- Replies: 15
- Views: 993
Re: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
Hi Fliss,
Many thanks! Really glad you like it.
Cheers,
Tristan
Many thanks! Really glad you like it.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sat Oct 08, 2022 8:58 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Gloves
- Replies: 12
- Views: 666
Re: City of Pain
Hi John, First off, I am very sorry to hear about your awful experience. Hope things are a lot better now. Overall, I like this poem and think it has a power. I would drop the first line, as the poem’s title is City of Pain, so I think the landscape you are describing is clear. The first part of s2 ...
- Sat Oct 08, 2022 6:36 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
- Replies: 15
- Views: 993
Re: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
Many thank John & Phil. Really pleased you both like this poem. This one’s done the rounds now quite a few times.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sat Oct 08, 2022 5:55 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Abergavenny Small Press
- Replies: 16
- Views: 1057
Re: Abergavenny Small Press
My congrats Phil. Enjoyed all four of these collaborations, but especially The Wisdom of Birds - the words seem to play the tune of that picture.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sat Oct 08, 2022 9:13 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
- Replies: 15
- Views: 993
Re: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
Many thanks Celeb. Really pleased you enjoyed it.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sat Oct 08, 2022 8:14 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
- Replies: 15
- Views: 993
One in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature
Hi All,
I have an old poem, which I workshopped here some time ago, appearing today in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature.
Here’s a link to it: https://inksweatandtears.co.uk/for-nati ... an-cauter/
Cheers,
Tristan
I have an old poem, which I workshopped here some time ago, appearing today in Ink Sweat & Tears’s NPD feature.
Here’s a link to it: https://inksweatandtears.co.uk/for-nati ... an-cauter/
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Oct 07, 2022 6:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: From the Book of Daniel
- Replies: 8
- Views: 453
Re: From the Book of Daniel
Hi John, So if I’ve understood the poem correctly, Nebuchadnezzar is reduced by God to nothing more than a sheep-like creature on all fours in God’s kingdom. I like that in his dream he sees a cut down tree (he maybe sees himself as a tree without knowing it), but then God breaks him like a twig. Ma...
- Fri Oct 07, 2022 8:03 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Not & Fliss in The Dirigible Balloon
- Replies: 8
- Views: 693
Re: Not & Fliss in The Dirigible Balloon
Many many congrats to both of you! Loved both poems. And what a great place to be published. Well done!
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Oct 07, 2022 7:21 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Death of Baldr
- Replies: 11
- Views: 572
Re: The Death of Baldr
Morning John, I don’t think it’s quite working at the moment, though I love the line whom Michelangelo took from the stone, That line is almost enough for me on its own. I’m not keen in the final line of s1. It’s verging on cliche. I like what you are doing at the end and don’t think it’s far off fr...
- Thu Oct 06, 2022 6:50 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
- Replies: 20
- Views: 1305
Re: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
Many congrats Fliss. That’s good to hear.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Thu Oct 06, 2022 6:52 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Shades and Curtains (version 6)
- Replies: 29
- Views: 1415
Re: Shades and Curtains (version 4)
Hi Perry,
Really like this one and the irony. Your final revision is my favourite. I do like Phil’s version too though. It’s clean and lets the irony and the idea do the work and there’s sadness in that final line.
Cheers,
Tristan
Really like this one and the irony. Your final revision is my favourite. I do like Phil’s version too though. It’s clean and lets the irony and the idea do the work and there’s sadness in that final line.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Oct 05, 2022 11:26 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
- Replies: 20
- Views: 1305
Re: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
Many thanks Fliss & Eira.
And my commiserations to Celeb and Fliss. I’m sure you will both have successes in the future.
Cheers,
Tristan
And my commiserations to Celeb and Fliss. I’m sure you will both have successes in the future.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Mon Oct 03, 2022 7:39 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
- Replies: 20
- Views: 1305
Re: Tristan and Eira in Snakeskin Magazine
Many thanks Phil & John. Really pleased you like these poems.
Many congrats Eira. Much enjoyed your poem.
Cheers,
Tristan
Many congrats Eira. Much enjoyed your poem.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Mon Oct 03, 2022 11:39 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Your Daily Poem
- Replies: 3
- Views: 377
Re: Your Daily Poem
Many congrats. Enjoyed.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Mon Oct 03, 2022 11:39 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Bangor Literary Journal
- Replies: 10
- Views: 713
Re: Bangor Literary Journal
Many congrats Phil. It’s definitely an engaging collaboration. May long it continue.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Sep 30, 2022 7:16 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Another rejection
- Replies: 6
- Views: 619
Re: Another rejection
Hi Perry, One Sentence Poems were never going to accept your type of poems. They publish very short compressed minimal poetry, which is very different to the poetry you write. You poetry is very good, but if this submission reflects your other submissions I’m not surprised you are being rejected. Yo...
- Sat Sep 24, 2022 7:52 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: A person whose life you're curious about
- Replies: 9
- Views: 739
Re: A person whose life you're curious about
Hi Kris, This poem has a great ending. It’s that link between fissured lips and how strange it felt to dab them - brilliant. I think that what leads up it could be leaner, although I recognise it’s written in a chatty style. IMO you could drop such phrases/sentences as “It is what it is, as they say...
- Wed Sep 21, 2022 11:00 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Zersetzung
- Replies: 10
- Views: 748
Re: Zersetzung
Hi Ray,
It’s a bleak poem. Terrible what the Stasi enacted.
Nice little historical snapshot.
Cheers,
Tristan
It’s a bleak poem. Terrible what the Stasi enacted.
Nice little historical snapshot.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Thu Sep 15, 2022 11:01 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: My Lover's Eyes
- Replies: 4
- Views: 475
Re: My Lover's Eyes
Hi Perry, These are enigmatic eyes. You tell the reader a lot about what these eyes are not, but very little about what they are. I’d like more in this respect (their colour, shape, size, focus, clarity, strength, softness, vision, …) and maybe some specifics about your relationship with the owner o...
- Tue Sep 13, 2022 11:14 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Stella
- Replies: 7
- Views: 535
Re: Stella
Hi Ray, There’s a few versions of this story (the young, cocky male moving in on what he thinks to be an attractive female only to find out they’re a transvestite - Crocodile Dundee 2 has a play on it), but telling it from the perspective of the drag Queen is an original perspective, and the end mad...
- Tue Sep 13, 2022 11:01 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: A Retrospective in Prosaic Free Verse (version 4)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 739
Re: A Retrospective in Prose (version 3)
Hi Perry, I really like the first three stanzas. They work really well. I think the narrative line of the poem is good until you get to ‘No need to inflame …’. After this, IMO is doesn’t have the interest of what came before. Maybe you need a well chosen image to create more to engage the reader in ...