Fibonnaci poem
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Here's an interesting form to use as a prompt, I got it from http://applehousepoetryworkshop.blogspot.com/
You have to write a 6 line poem and the lines need 1,1,2,3,5,8 syllables respectively - any takers?
Sharra
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You have to write a 6 line poem and the lines need 1,1,2,3,5,8 syllables respectively - any takers?
Sharra
xx
It is at the edge of the
petal that love waits
petal that love waits
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Sounds fun. I'll give it a go.
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The
fly
still lies
so life-like
on the window sill.
Only the brush will move him now.
fly
still lies
so life-like
on the window sill.
Only the brush will move him now.
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Sharra, this was too much math for me! I did it but hardly think its a pretty poem. Ah well!
One
plant,
growing,
three petals,
form spirals curving,
bear a fibonacci number.
Or
One
pout,
growing,
two soft lips
form a kiss, curving,
plants a blushing cheek deserving.
One
plant,
growing,
three petals,
form spirals curving,
bear a fibonacci number.
Or
One
pout,
growing,
two soft lips
form a kiss, curving,
plants a blushing cheek deserving.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Finally managed to do some
In
the
Tardis,
Doctor Who
roams the galaxy
fights evil daleks across time.
One
by
one, she
plucks petals
counting as they fall,
crushed beneath his feet as he leaves.
They
kiss
beneath
thunder clouds,
feeling lightning lit
raindrops crash onto sunburnt skin.
Sharra
xx
In
the
Tardis,
Doctor Who
roams the galaxy
fights evil daleks across time.
One
by
one, she
plucks petals
counting as they fall,
crushed beneath his feet as he leaves.
They
kiss
beneath
thunder clouds,
feeling lightning lit
raindrops crash onto sunburnt skin.
Sharra
xx
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It is at the edge of the
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petal that love waits
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a
thought
often
starts simply
but soon gets wound round
twisted tightly till the ends fray
thought
often
starts simply
but soon gets wound round
twisted tightly till the ends fray
Rosencrantz: What are you playing at? Guildenstern: Words. Words. They're all we have to go on.
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I
think
that you
think that I
can be difficult.
But I'm so low maintenance!
Sky
clouds
the color,
lemon pie.
with a golden crust,
awash in tangerine day dreams.
groan...I know, I know...
She (Sharra)
must
be held
to account!
Responsible for
such torturous math poetry!
think
that you
think that I
can be difficult.
But I'm so low maintenance!
Sky
clouds
the color,
lemon pie.
with a golden crust,
awash in tangerine day dreams.
groan...I know, I know...
She (Sharra)
must
be held
to account!
Responsible for
such torturous math poetry!
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Dave, you are too clever!If
we
add the
sum of the
two numbers before
this one, we get the next - voilà!
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Yes David too good will you please stop shaming the rest of us Nice one Bodkin.
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David - that has to be the definition of form dictating content
Sharra
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Sharra
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It is at the edge of the
petal that love waits
petal that love waits
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I...
I...
miss you...
I pretend...
that you are still here
knowing there is no cure for this
I...
miss you...
I pretend...
that you are still here
knowing there is no cure for this
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Have we started a thread here like haiku and bits?
If we did, I like it!
Cheers,
Kim
Snow
would
be nice
if it were
not so very cold
but fell like a toasty blanket.
If we did, I like it!
Cheers,
Kim
Snow
would
be nice
if it were
not so very cold
but fell like a toasty blanket.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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I
try
but fail,
and failing
find the strength to try.
I will escape the hook of forms.
try
but fail,
and failing
find the strength to try.
I will escape the hook of forms.
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These are addictive
I
fall.
Undone
shoelaces
tripping me, sending
me flying face down in the mud.
New
red
wellies
splashing in
puddles. Leaping high,
landing hard, I create tsunami.
New
shoes
creaking
as I creep
into his bedroom.
I hope his parents don’t hear me.
Soft,
pink,
twirling
ballet shoes
pirouette, whirling
faster and faster around me.
I
fall.
Undone
shoelaces
tripping me, sending
me flying face down in the mud.
New
red
wellies
splashing in
puddles. Leaping high,
landing hard, I create tsunami.
New
shoes
creaking
as I creep
into his bedroom.
I hope his parents don’t hear me.
Soft,
pink,
twirling
ballet shoes
pirouette, whirling
faster and faster around me.
It is at the edge of the
petal that love waits
petal that love waits
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New contents for the book?
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Proud
Sly
Haughty
Arrogant
All words to describe
an angel who plunged from the stars.
Sly
Haughty
Arrogant
All words to describe
an angel who plunged from the stars.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
I have read some of these. To me they're not poems, they're word games. I just cannot see the point in writing in this way. Why use these strait jackets ? Why self-impose such draconian restraints ? I just don't understand it. But then, that's me.
I agree with you that (most of) these are just word games. But word games are fun, no? And straitjackets can produce good poetry - vide the syllable-counting forms of Dylan Thomas, Gavin Ewart, or others.Nigel wrote:I have read some of these. To me they're not poems, they're word games. I just cannot see the point in writing in this way. Why use these strait jackets ? Why self-impose such draconian restraints ? I just don't understand it. But then, that's me.
These fibonacci ditties are especially unnatural of course, but occasionally one of them hits you unexpectedly in the solar plexus - ooph - and makes use of the form in a good epigram - as I think R. Broath's does, above.
fine words butter no parsnips
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You got it in one
And if I'm honest
Sharra
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so they're for fun!! And to see just how far such an artifical form can be stretched.they're word games
And if I'm honest
is how I feel when I try and write in Iambic pentameterWhy use these strait jackets ? Why self-impose such draconian restraints ? I just don't understand it. But then, that's me.
Sharra
xx
It is at the edge of the
petal that love waits
petal that love waits