Buttercup

[courage my boy]

Buttercup

You take me away
Golden chins shine on my soul
As dewey grass rises
through my naked toes
Soflty spoken lovers
Parading on buttercups and daisies
The polka dots of colour
on the velvet green lawn
while a magnificent yellow hue
Beckons from the sun
Covering us both
We look into each others eyes
Longingly and embrace
As we realise we are lost again

[Suzanne]

Hello Courage,

This is a very sweet thought put into words. The innocence of the couple is felt in the flowers you used and the simple colors in images.
It is a good beginning for a Beginner. Very nice ideas. It would be a wonderful gift if it was written for someone special. Welcome to PG.

Warmly,
Suzanne

[Jjaz]

I like the visual nature of this poem. I wasn't sure what to make of the capital placements but can see why you might want to keep it punctuation free to present the poem in an uncluttered way.

thanks

Jjaz

[Nicky B]

Loved the dewey grass and naked toes, could feel this,
made me smile.

Nicky B.

[courage my boy]

Thank you for kind replies, I wanted this poem to be like a snapshot of a summers day with the one you love, it was nice to be welcomed to the forum, I will look to review your poems over the next few days. Hi and Bye!

[gavin]

it sounder like you had your pants down in long grass