Do the melodies draw pictures in your head?
Evoke emotions you thought were long dead?
Send you tripping down that memory lane?
Reopen old wounds and reawaken old pain?
Old Tunes
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Suzanne
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Kevin, I believe you can do it. Start by just thinking of another quatrain, 4 lines, and take a step back and ponder it.
If you sonnet this... I will push myself to do one as well. I have been wanting to but drag my feet!
Suzanne
If you sonnet this... I will push myself to do one as well. I have been wanting to but drag my feet!
Suzanne
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twoleftfeet
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Kev,
My first thought was : it's a wee bit corny
My 2nd thought was : you'd get away with it if it were a lyric (which seems so appropriate, given the title)
-you'd need more verses, of course
My first thought was : it's a wee bit corny
My 2nd thought was : you'd get away with it if it were a lyric (which seems so appropriate, given the title)
-you'd need more verses, of course
Instead of just sitting on the fence - why not stand in the middle of the road?
You're on Suzanne. I will have a go. but in the words of Sting:Suzanne wrote:Kevin, I believe you can do it. Start by just thinking of another quatrain, 4 lines, and take a step back and ponder it.
If you sonnet this... I will push myself to do one as well. I have been wanting to but drag my feet!
Suzanne
"I wanna write you a sonnet but I don't know where to start.
I'm so used to laughing at the things in my heart"
or words to that effect.
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
Yea! you got a point there. I think I could come up with a couple of verses and a chorus but would need the help of someone musical to provide a melody I think.twoleftfeet wrote:Kev,
My first thought was : it's a wee bit corny
My 2nd thought was : you'd get away with it if it were a lyric (which seems so appropriate, given the title)
-you'd need more verses, of course
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
I'm with the "feels incomplete" brigade.
Where or how it goes from there is up to you but I feel that having set up the questions there needs to be some form of response.
As a song? I'm not so sure. We all have tunes that evoke memories and a song implies a tune which could ruin the illusion. Anyway (IMHO) very few songs make good poems, even great ones, try reading the words of "No woman, no cry"
All the best
Steve
Where or how it goes from there is up to you but I feel that having set up the questions there needs to be some form of response.
As a song? I'm not so sure. We all have tunes that evoke memories and a song implies a tune which could ruin the illusion. Anyway (IMHO) very few songs make good poems, even great ones, try reading the words of "No woman, no cry"
All the best
Steve