Haiku Train

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oranggunung
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Sat Mar 12, 2011 3:27 pm

shadows, just watching,
waiting to meet their makers -
the bombs are falling
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Sat Mar 12, 2011 7:10 pm

The bombs are falling.
Fear the day they stop. Manself
is alive and well.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Mar 13, 2011 5:53 am

Is alive and well,
Sees his good self reflected-
She studies his back.
arunansu
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Sun Mar 13, 2011 1:01 pm

she studies his back
so many of the bricks
withwering
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Mon Mar 14, 2011 6:54 am

Withering snow piles
Pastel haze like gauze curtains
Sharp edge of sunshine
Travis
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Tue Mar 15, 2011 9:46 pm

Sharp edge of sunshine
finds its way through patio
door. TV obscured.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
terriblefish
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Fri Mar 18, 2011 2:26 am

door. TV obscured.
It's rigid and digital;
Bored. Off to seek more.
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Sat Mar 19, 2011 6:58 am

Bored. Off to seek more
with determined tutu legs,
Watermelon pink.
TDF
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Sat Mar 19, 2011 2:10 pm

watermelon pink
staining white lined trousers
holiday tattoos
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Sun Mar 20, 2011 9:12 am

holiday tattoos,
old french lace on bare shoulders
Marseille bouillabaisse.
oranggunung
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Sun Mar 20, 2011 7:04 pm

Marseille bouillabaisse
all the fishes of the sea
shoaling in a bowl
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Tue Mar 22, 2011 11:05 am

Shoaling in a bowl
Freed toes in muddy bottom
The day suspended
Marc
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Tue Mar 22, 2011 2:33 pm

The day suspended
in a rocking railway car.
My lunch upended.
oranggunung
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Fri Mar 25, 2011 1:53 pm

my lunch upended
pineapple upside-down cake
with blue cheese dressing
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Fri Mar 25, 2011 5:16 pm

With blue cheese, dressing
by the bed holding red wine.
Afternoon sliding.
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Fri Mar 25, 2011 6:16 pm

Afternoon sliding
metal burning exposed flesh
twelve steps climbed again.
oranggunung
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Sun Mar 27, 2011 4:43 pm

twelve steps climbed again
from soak to evangelist
temptation vanquished
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Mon Mar 28, 2011 9:41 am

Temptation vanquished
all my feeble self control.
Caught and gutter bound.
Marc
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 10:14 am

Caught and gutter bound
no more. Syllable ticket.
Haiku passenger.
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 11:48 am

Haiku passenger,
Forever moving onward;
To where, I don't know.
Travis
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 6:49 pm

To where, I don't know
my poor little Sydney girl
will go. But I dream.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 10:21 pm

Will go. But I dream.
Circular; but if I fail
and my dream dies now?
Before you shave with Occam’s razor - Try epilation or microlaser
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 10:29 pm

And my dream dies now,
fours days distant from her death.
Annihilation.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
JohnLott
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 11:49 pm

Annihilation
For my mates at Suvla Bay
Waltzing Matilda
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Suzanne
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Tue Apr 05, 2011 5:53 pm

Waltzing Matilda,
A cold case of bad manners
And creative twist.
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