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Wed Feb 08, 2012 10:08 pm

The plural of goose
should be goose.
Akin to sheep
or fish or moose.

Plump and wedge,
flock and team,
skein and gaggle
should also be goose.

To migrate in a V
should be to goose.
To honk and shit
on my roof? To goose.

Then, I might
be able to write
the odd poem
in February.

- Neil
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Wed Feb 08, 2012 10:49 pm

Hi
I like this..such whimsical pieces are much to my taste.

I feel your pain.... :D
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Thu Feb 09, 2012 5:05 am

Hi
(as well as copulating with much fuss and noise) It would would make for some interesting verse - but, since it is Poet's duty to push language to new heights, we can authorise it; Get goosing everyone!

Loved this tongue-in-cheek piece! Good work.

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Thu Feb 09, 2012 8:37 pm

Hi nar,

It is indeed fun to read, both the language and content. I always admire your word play.

Thanks for the read,

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Mon Feb 13, 2012 7:44 pm

Thanks, everyone.

Just a little lighthearted nonsense to try to lift the winter woes.

Seems to have been taken exactly as intended.

Kindest,

- Neil
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Wed Feb 15, 2012 10:22 am

Oh nice one Neil :)

There is certainly room for 'lighthearted nonsense.' It's the kind of verse that rolls out of the mind sometimes. Light relief perhaps from all the deep thinking we do?

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Mon Feb 20, 2012 7:59 pm

Personally, I think the singular of sheep should be shoop. After all, two feet, one foot.

Good stuff, Neil - witty and well expressed.

Cheers
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Tue Feb 28, 2012 1:37 pm

Nicely done, Neil.

I think poet's should be allowed to be playful, and this is certainly that.

I just wondered, perhaps as some additional silliness, if you might wrong-foot your readers with the last verse.

Something like this:

Then, I might,
if the words shook loose,
be able to write
the odd poem
in February.


The additional line sets things up for a neat closure, which you ignore.

Just a whimsical notion


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Tue Feb 28, 2012 5:53 pm

Neil, I really like it, except for the last verse. It's a clever piece of bathos, but I was enjoying your goosing (oo-er missus) so much until then that I hoped you'd finish with more of the same.

The first three verses are great.

Cheers

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Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:31 pm

Thank you, gents.

@ Deryn: Deep thinking? Me? ;)

@ Peter: Thanks for that, always nice when you drop in. I'm with you on sheep / shoop. Additionally, I think the plural of toothbrush should be teethbrush.

@ og: Ha, that's a fab idea! All left-field wrong-footing monkey-business is right up my lane.

@ David: You're right, of course; the last verse is way out of kilter with the first three. I can't remember now if that was deliberate, or if I just ran out of goosey stuff to say. I suspect the latter.

And once more - thanks everyone.

Kindest,

- Neil
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