Got bored today so thought i would have a go at writing a poem
This mirror does not reflect me
this mirror does not show my heart
this mirror does not show the blackness
this mirror only shows love
This mirror shows no fractures
this mirror is just a lie
this mirror shows no heartache
this mirror shows a disguise
This mirror has forgotten
this mirror does not care
wish my heart could reflect
this mirror
Not 100% about the last two lines
this mirror
This Mirror
I really like the idea of repeating "this mirror" giving rhythm and structure, I did find though it started to distract me from the rest of the line in the first two verses.
I wonder if taking out 'this mirror' on lines 2 and 6 and replacing with 'it' would help? Or maybe it weakens the effect you are after, see what you think.
Thank you.
This mirror does not reflect me
It does not show my heart
this mirror does not show the blackness
This mirror only shows love
This mirror shows no fractures
it is just a lie
this mirror shows no heartache
this mirror shows a disguise
I wonder if taking out 'this mirror' on lines 2 and 6 and replacing with 'it' would help? Or maybe it weakens the effect you are after, see what you think.
Thank you.
This mirror does not reflect me
It does not show my heart
this mirror does not show the blackness
This mirror only shows love
This mirror shows no fractures
it is just a lie
this mirror shows no heartache
this mirror shows a disguise