Brave New World - Revisited

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xanadu
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Fri Jan 23, 2015 2:28 pm

Brave New World –Revisited

I’m leaving the sea tomorrow, because I think I can.
Been here for ages, it’s time for a change.
Of course there will be worries and fears,
what to eat, the loneliness of being first.

But I think I’m well equipped, I have everything I need.
If it doesn’t work out I can always return.
Myself and others have been preparing for a long time,
Aeons really

No one’s managed to go permanently before
But I've had a few trial runs over the years.
The climate’s right, the challenge beckons,
a brave new world, no time for tears

Right, let’s see; final check of all the gear.
Yep, fins strong enough to support my weight,
A new- fangled lung in case the gills don’t work.
Say goodbye to my fishy friends, and I'm off!


Thinks….did I pack the sun lotion?
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Fri Jan 23, 2015 6:38 pm

An interesting and amusing take on the evolutionary process. Enjoyed! :)

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Sun Jan 25, 2015 8:47 pm

Quite whimsical but I enjoyed my gradual discovery of your intended meaning. Some bits were more effective than others and this:
Myself and others have been preparing for a long time,
Aeons really
I liked.
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Sun Jan 25, 2015 10:23 pm

Thank you Kev and Aleph. Appreciate your input.
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