Lonely Hearts Club

[xanadu]

Lonely Hearts Club

Feeling small and lonely.
Place is too big, enormous really.
Have a mate here but can’t get near him.
To be honest, we’ve never met
And at this rate not likely to.
There are others around
But they live on a different level

Some are attractive, others repel me.
Suppose I should mix, just don’t have the energy.
A drop of sunlight might help me
Get on the same wavelength,
But apparently their place is full.
Any visit there would be short lived

Then I’d be back where I started,
Somewhat enlightened but still in a spin.
Shouldn’t moan, could be worse.
Guy I know shares with a group of others.
Tight bunch though, they all stick together,
A strong bond between them

He says they’re a class act, but a moody lot.
Sometimes up, sometimes down.
Lots of jostling for position too,
Either top or bottom, strange
They’re all very close though,
Never split up.

On reflection,
There’s a lot of uncertainty there.
Difficult to get a position,
Especially at this speed.
Guess I’ll continue moving in my own circle
For another billion years.

Sigh…. An electron in a hydrogen atom is a lonely life

[k-j]

Ha ha - not bad, well put together. Nice build-up and plenty of funny analogies. I'd just question why it's arranged as poetry, seems more like prose to me.

[ray miller]

I like it, there's perhaps too much repetitive stuff about the group dynamics, but I like the voice. I'd definitely end it on this line

Especially at this speed.

[xanadu]

Thank you for your constructive comments.