Politics.

[Gbn]

A quick missive..

Let's all stand up and right the wrongs, put the world to right
Sit and talk of genocide and all that other shite
A united voice that gives us choice to right the wrongs that matter
No! What we really need to do is stand up to Sepp Blatter.

[David]

It's a good point, Gb. Frankie Boyle made a very similar point in the Guardian this week - http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfre ... l-thatcher ... perhaps Sepp Blatter is just a monstrous panto distraction from the really important stuff.

[ray miller]

Yes, agreed. The important thing about Blatter is that he's foreign. There's a belief in this country that bribery and corruption is something others do - despite all the evidence to the contrary.
For a 4 line poem there's a lot of repetition - right the wrongs, world to rights, right the wrongs(again).

[Gbn]

Let's all stand up and put the world right
Sit and talk of genocide and all that other shite
A united voice that gives us choice to change the things that matter
No! What we really need to do is stand up to Sepp Blatter.


Thanks for comments, was a bit of a knee jerk reaction, think above reads better..?

[cynwulf]

yes it's better , gets the point over without the verbal clutter of the original. An appropriate comment on the relative blather of important and much less important we experience nowadays.
regards, c.

[brianedwards]

I'm not usually squeamish, or sensitive to such things, but lumping genocide in with "all that other shite", in a poem about corruption in sports administration, just seems very very wrong.

B.

[Moth]

Agree with the above, also I feel the poem would be made stronger by adding other examples, no shortage of 'ight' rhymes.

[EatMyPoetry]

I'm not usually squeamish, or sensitive to such things, but lumping genocide in with "all that other shite", in a poem about corruption in sports administration, just seems very very wrong.

B.

I agree with you but this line highlights that more people wish to talk about Blatter than genocide, unfortunately.