I hope you know...

[Mayflower]

Mum I hope you know....

I sat on the hard plastic seat all those nights,
just to rub your feet

I moisturised your skin,
To try and stop it from becoming so sore and thin

I rubbed your head, to try and comfort you, whilst you lay dying in the bed,
I hope you remember everything I said

I sang your favourite songs to you, when I knew your time was almost due

I cuddled up in bed with you, whilst everyone was asleep,
in hopes that some how, my crying eyes would stop to weep

I sat by your bed day by day, night by night,
Not letting my tiredness win the fight,
Scared to miss a word you said or some actions you might do,
And to cherish every moment I had left with you

I made sure I got you everything you asked for,
Your juice, ice cream and lollipops,
In hopes your asking would never stop

I fought for every treatment and to even get you home,
But it seems that path you were ment to take was already set in stone

I held your hand and watched you die,
I even heard you let out your last sigh,
I told you that I loved you and tried so hard not to cry,
But I could not dry my eyes mum as I watched you die


I hope you know I love you,
I hope you know I tried,
I hope you know I'm sorry for all the times I lied

I hope you know you are my greatest friend,
And this is not truly the end

I hope you know I will think of you in everything I do,
And every beat my heart makes mum,
That beat is for you!

[David]

Very touching, Mayflower. And obviously very personal.

You have to consider whether you would like us to comment on this, perhaps making suggestions that you might find insensitive or inept for such a personal piece, or whether just sharing it is enough.

For the record, I rather like it. We can leave it there if you like. Up to you!

Cheers

David

[Mayflower]

Very touching, Mayflower. And obviously very personal.

You have to consider whether you would like us to comment on this, perhaps making suggestions that you might find insensitive or inept for such a personal piece, or whether just sharing it is enough.

For the record, I rather like it. We can leave it there if you like. Up to you!

Cheers

David

Hi David, it's the first piece I have wrote, I tried to explain some of the things I went through whilst my mum was in hospital so certain things will be hard for others to understand. I find writing poems/rhymes a great help to myself. I'm open to comments and suggestions as I would like to continue writing but I'm very inexperienced. It is a personal piece but I won't be offended by any suggestions or constructive criticism as to how I could make the piece better and help me with future pieces I write.
Thank you

[Katherine]

I had the privilege of being with both of my parents when they died. I hope they know how I felt too. Beautifully expressed! x