Shards - lifeless feathers
strewn across the bitchamen
a piece of wing
a long elegant neck
refracting light
in piercing lines
hard, cold, into the shadows.
Even a swan has a love child.
Even a swan has a love child
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hey
love the starkness of this, the image of the white of the swan on the dark of the road was really striking
refracting light
in piercing lines
hard, cold, into the shadows.
Benjy
*whisper* bitchamen is spelt bitumen
love the starkness of this, the image of the white of the swan on the dark of the road was really striking
refracting light
in piercing lines
hard, cold, into the shadows.
Benjy
*whisper* bitchamen is spelt bitumen
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Yes Yesterday, stark image indeed. Nice one. Minimalist. Only just realised you're from Albany - lived near melbourne for eight years of my childhood (my two sisters still live there).
Thanks for your poem.
Mick
Thanks for your poem.
Mick
thanx...
it was floating round in my head 4 a while glad u liked it
yes.. i didnt know how to spel 'bitumen' so i figured id setle on 'bitch a men' nice touch i figured... but ill fix it now i know how to spell it... cheers
Jester i think u've got the wrong 'Albany' there are a few... mines in Western Australia... nowhere near melbourn...
by the way.. i read in the paper the other day that swans 'the symbol of long lasting love and faithfulness..... have love children....'
thanx so much!
it was floating round in my head 4 a while glad u liked it
yes.. i didnt know how to spel 'bitumen' so i figured id setle on 'bitch a men' nice touch i figured... but ill fix it now i know how to spell it... cheers
Jester i think u've got the wrong 'Albany' there are a few... mines in Western Australia... nowhere near melbourn...
by the way.. i read in the paper the other day that swans 'the symbol of long lasting love and faithfulness..... have love children....'
thanx so much!
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what is bitumen????? is that the asphalt???.... besides me not knwing what that is ... i enjoyed ur short poem