Haiku Train

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bluebells mark the path
a tradition in these woods
to believe in spring
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Fri Jun 21, 2024 8:07 am

Spring with open leaves?
If that is all you have got
then find better lines
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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then, find better lines
we've crow's feet in the corners
twinkles in our eyes
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twinkles in our eyes
serve to highlight excitement
do you feel horny?
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sun Jun 23, 2024 5:39 am

"Do you feel horny?"
If that is all you have got
then find better lines.
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then find better lines,
folded notes, and written sighs
empty your pockets
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empty your pockets
how easy is strolling here
without nostalgia
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Without nostalgia
all past is lost in self love
what future then come
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what future then comes
through flowers watered today
In weedless borders
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In weedless borders
hoarders in needless corners
pile up their rubbish
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pile up their rubbish
until the gravediggers came
to bury hoarders
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to bury hoarders
the white bones of the rubbish
are exacavated
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

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are excavated
and overtime myths become
rooted and scented
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rooted and scented
a bile bear expelling bile
trapped and demented
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