I like these short poems. They're practically Japanese in their brevity. (Note to anyone who knows what they're talking about - are they practically Japanese in their brevity?)
Possibly abandoned rather than betrayed? After all, we haven't been seeing another moon.
I think you could do more with this. But that might have a negative impact on the whole brevity thing.
Nice! So obvious once someone comes up with the idea. (All crits are longer than your poem!)
Nice read
Dave
Cheers
Dave
"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
" [Tom]