The Aging Fleet of Half Moon Bay

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Dagdason
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Sun Mar 25, 2007 1:42 am

Tis foggy morn deemed so forlorn,
From distance sounds a augur horn
Upon the water gray and green
Sit tattered vessels o’ myth n’ dream

Aqua chariots of blue and white
Sway to and fro in dimming light
Haggard be, not one shown bright
Seek caring reprieve from this their plight

Here La Boehme sings pleadingly
While Mischief near by fleeting be
Camelot upon the sea, does seize
Avalon’s mist which drifts in breeze

Morning Star shines not these days
As Molly’s Dog still sleeping lays
Sea chariots come nigh with aloft fanfare
Of sooty birds dancing for meager share

A sailor’s pipe sparks in the night
Exposing embers in swirling flight
A wizened soul, grizzled and gray
Bathes patiently his ship of day

Mezza Luna beckons him near
Delivering tankards of golden cheer
Barbara blast a rocky tune
While blackened night gives way to moon

As misty tendrils of salt air
Wrap round the masts with seeming yare
The parting flocks wish better day
To the aging fleet of Half Moon Bay
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Nicola
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Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:53 am

Hi there and welcome to the forum. Please can you read our rules. We ask everyone to do 2 reviews for every poem you post. If you catch up on your crits you will find you get more response to your own poems.

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Nicola
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