I
operator
pushed me
up against the wall
said,
why don't you go on
home boy, no use in you
hangin around
he caught me with that
marble smile and ghost voice
of his
II
said to him man
got this old beat up
chevy truck
that doesn't run no more
and what's more i've got a
dead man in my trunk
his name is paul
the evangelist
III
well i just got to catch
this railroad car to my
hometown
pennsylvania
philadelphia
IV
how you gonna do that boy
when i bust your balls some more
stand against that wall
i'm gonna teach you how to fall
like a man
marble smile (mp3 on request)
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twoleftfeet
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This is a bit bleak for me, DJH, but I suppose it could be interpreted as
darkly humorous.
Is the "operator" a cop?
Having the car but needing to catch a train seemed odd - perhaps the
operator could be asking the narrator about a body he's just found
in a car?
I'm intrigued by this and would like to hear it.
Geoff
darkly humorous.
Is the "operator" a cop?
Having the car but needing to catch a train seemed odd - perhaps the
operator could be asking the narrator about a body he's just found
in a car?
I'm intrigued by this and would like to hear it.
Geoff
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kozmikdave
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Gidday DJH
I'm a little confused with the story as well. The way the lyrics are written down there are some interesting things going on. For example...
why don't you go on
home boy, no use in you
hangin around
was "home-boy" a consideration?
I can handle the train idea as the poor old chevy is done busted. There does seem to be a confusion as to who is who, though.
So, I don't know if it is intentional, but there seems to be a bit of religious rebellion and consequent rejection-by-the-church. At first I thought it was the civil law, but I am now leaning towards the beating up of "back-sliders" law. That makes the operator a minister, elder or deacon. See what happens when you leave it so ambiguous - we all start inserting our own experiences.
I'd love to hear it. I shall post my email address to you.
Cheers
Dave
PS Has anybody tried to attach MP3 files to these posts yet?
I'm a little confused with the story as well. The way the lyrics are written down there are some interesting things going on. For example...
why don't you go on
home boy, no use in you
hangin around
was "home-boy" a consideration?
I can handle the train idea as the poor old chevy is done busted. There does seem to be a confusion as to who is who, though.
So, I don't know if it is intentional, but there seems to be a bit of religious rebellion and consequent rejection-by-the-church. At first I thought it was the civil law, but I am now leaning towards the beating up of "back-sliders" law. That makes the operator a minister, elder or deacon. See what happens when you leave it so ambiguous - we all start inserting our own experiences.
I'd love to hear it. I shall post my email address to you.
Cheers
Dave
PS Has anybody tried to attach MP3 files to these posts yet?
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beautifulloser
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Hi DJH
I like the dissonance and use of intonation at the beginning of the track, it lacks any sort of discernable scale you're using to develop a melody though which with the intonation as itis I think it could use.
The whole feel of the song is quite original, but the technical aspects are letting it down from being a well played listen. I can hear that you listen to Drake, some of the chords are nice "Drakey" chords with a minor/dissonant feel.
On the finger picking, can hear what you're trying to do, it does need work, particularly the base line, if you pull it off it will sound really good. I know how hard it can be to keep them going and if you pulled this off live then not a bad effort at all.
I like the vocal delivery, has a folk esque roughness to it which I personally like.
You' have got the workings of a good song here, musically and lyrically I think it could work if you polish it up.
Could not follow the story that well , pictured a confrontation, and old buy beating up a younger guy pinned up against the wall . . . . There's an odd sense of humour about it which I personally liked. Thought they were good lyrics that suited the mood.
Cheers
BL
PS: I'd end the song on :
i'm gonna teach you how to fall
like a man
Just cut it, dead.
You can tell me to fuck off now!
I like the dissonance and use of intonation at the beginning of the track, it lacks any sort of discernable scale you're using to develop a melody though which with the intonation as itis I think it could use.
The whole feel of the song is quite original, but the technical aspects are letting it down from being a well played listen. I can hear that you listen to Drake, some of the chords are nice "Drakey" chords with a minor/dissonant feel.
On the finger picking, can hear what you're trying to do, it does need work, particularly the base line, if you pull it off it will sound really good. I know how hard it can be to keep them going and if you pulled this off live then not a bad effort at all.
I like the vocal delivery, has a folk esque roughness to it which I personally like.
You' have got the workings of a good song here, musically and lyrically I think it could work if you polish it up.
Could not follow the story that well , pictured a confrontation, and old buy beating up a younger guy pinned up against the wall . . . . There's an odd sense of humour about it which I personally liked. Thought they were good lyrics that suited the mood.
Cheers
BL
PS: I'd end the song on :
i'm gonna teach you how to fall
like a man
Just cut it, dead.
You can tell me to fuck off now!