The time comes in everyone's life
( as Grandma used to say!) and my old friend
Sammy too, opined
I should tie the sacred knot, soon.
I had no objections before,
now got plenty.
My "well wishers"
have always wondered
when and how can
a brat like me find a "suitable girl"!
No, no, I am not that kind,
only the seasons changed my girlfriends
( believe me, I wanted to stick with Susie only!)
Me too like to picture myself beside a beaming wife
and a few children, with the youngest yelling,
the oldest cackling, and the intermediate ones
roaming all over the place.
Yet these are the lovable aspects, maybe.
On the debit side, you will be answering to bizarre questionnaires
"Who is Mona? I saw the name in your inbox! Who IS she?"
"Have you paid the electricity bill?"
"Why don't you look for a better job?" . . . and the list grows.
In addition, stricter rules and regulations
as regards the dress code, eating ( and drinking) habits,
stag parties, etc will be imposed.
No, I can't indulge in such a "self-inflicted" imprisonment.
Rather, I may opt for a "live-in" with someone like .. err
well, anyone who has got the "right curves at the right places"!
What do you say? Yeah, sure Mona might do, but . . .
she's got a jailor-like Dad who glare at me so coldly
as if Goliath is watching David for the first time!
What? Oh , no , Susie told me to "POP OFF"!
I am . . . looking around now . . . maybe, Tina . . .
Pardon me, any better suggestions, anyone?
Marriage: Self Inflicted Imprisonment?
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I am not very good at crits, but this was...strange. Kinda rambled, and not necessariy in the "rythmically mad" fashion.
I DID love the line "Rather, I may opt for a "live-in" with someone like .. err
well, anyone who has got the "right curves at the right places"!
A true bachelor.
I DID love the line "Rather, I may opt for a "live-in" with someone like .. err
well, anyone who has got the "right curves at the right places"!
A true bachelor.
Dear Transparent,
First of all let me thank you for the compliment "true bachelor". Yes you are right, it IS a ramble. And the theme is too ordinary. Confusions of a bachelor's mind. But I tried to write it in a very casual and conversational tone. It may not work, but I wanted to do something different.
Thanks for your reply.
Cheers.
First of all let me thank you for the compliment "true bachelor". Yes you are right, it IS a ramble. And the theme is too ordinary. Confusions of a bachelor's mind. But I tried to write it in a very casual and conversational tone. It may not work, but I wanted to do something different.
Thanks for your reply.
Cheers.
Enjoyed reading this – a great write...nice lines, nice humour ….
It seems like a bit of a paradox…….although it explains very well what married life would be like and how it would be a sentence……I also feel the narrator is himself imprisoned……and an indecisive prisoner at that…
Not sure about the last line – maybe me not liking poems to end with a question..
Enjoyable, thanks…
It seems like a bit of a paradox…….although it explains very well what married life would be like and how it would be a sentence……I also feel the narrator is himself imprisoned……and an indecisive prisoner at that…
Not sure about the last line – maybe me not liking poems to end with a question..
Enjoyable, thanks…
Dear Merlin & David,
Thanks for your replies. I at first thought hardly anyone will read this!Yes David, I changed the pace. I feel, if I write on ordinary topics, I need to use a different style. You people may say, this was an "experiment".
Cheers.
Thanks for your replies. I at first thought hardly anyone will read this!Yes David, I changed the pace. I feel, if I write on ordinary topics, I need to use a different style. You people may say, this was an "experiment".
Cheers.