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kozmikdave
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Sun Mar 30, 2008 7:46 am

Novel? Ironic -
when latest fashion for kids
sits in my wardrobe.
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Sun Mar 30, 2008 2:04 pm

Sits in my wardrobe
a balding baboon, who
raped my wife today.
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"Raped my wife today."
"Aye, they burnt my house down too!"
"Man, I hate Vikings!"
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Mon Mar 31, 2008 10:43 am

Man, i hate vikings!
so full of sex and hatred
for those they control
TDF
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Wed Apr 02, 2008 4:38 pm

for those they control
with forced labour and shackles.
rise up, slaves, rise up!
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Thu Apr 03, 2008 8:31 am

Rise up, slaves, rise up
and bring me scotch on the rocks,
slippers and my pipe.
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Thu Apr 03, 2008 1:44 pm

slippers and his pipe
thrown away from the window
the moon mocks at him
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Thu Apr 03, 2008 5:14 pm

the moon mocks at him
I told my father that the
moon was a bastard
meh and bah are wonderful words
Lake
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Thu Apr 03, 2008 6:51 pm

moon was a bastard
that hid on mid-autumn day
how disappointing
k-j
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Thu Apr 03, 2008 8:46 pm

How disappointing:
what I thought was a peach, was
a mould-covered plum.
fine words butter no parsnips
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Fri Apr 04, 2008 5:24 pm

a mould-covered plum.
that is how she described it,
old man genitals
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Fri Apr 04, 2008 10:38 pm

old mans genitals
swing like a hung man on a
sunny afternoon
kozmikdave
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Sat Apr 05, 2008 12:50 am

sunny afternoon,
recliner chair, my feet up,
cold beer and long grass.
Lake
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Sat Apr 05, 2008 1:45 am

cold beer and long grass
mosquitoes come to visit
from ten thousand lakes
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Sat Apr 05, 2008 7:30 pm

from ten thousand lakes
couldn't catch one bloody fish
I'm shit at fishing
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Sun Apr 06, 2008 8:34 am

I'm shit at fishing
off boats on rough ocean waves.
Fish feed on vomit.
Lake
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Sun Apr 06, 2008 2:43 pm

Fish feed on vomit
We on plants growing on dung
The world recycle
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Tue Apr 08, 2008 10:06 pm

The world recycle
or we will drown in plastic
rubbish living, that
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Sun Apr 13, 2008 12:07 pm

Rubbish living - that
caste which lives on city dumps
recycling food scraps.
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Tue Apr 15, 2008 6:04 pm

recycling food scraps
the maggot is a wonder
but I do hate flys
meh and bah are wonderful words
Elphin
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Tue Apr 15, 2008 6:57 pm

But I do hate flys;
they're easily left undone.
Examine your zip.
TDF
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Wed Apr 16, 2008 5:38 pm

Examine your zip
if you're in America
otherwise: postcode
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Tue Apr 22, 2008 9:16 am

otherwise, postcode
is used as status measure,
just like first class stamps.
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Tue Apr 22, 2008 9:41 am

Just like 1st class stamps:
you pay top dollar for a
2nd class service
.
.
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2nd class service
below par for Wimbledon
must try harder, Tim
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