Fossil (BEGIN)

New to poetry? Unsure about the quality of your work? Then why not post here to receive some gentle feedback.
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Travis
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 2:08 am

Fuel.
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 8:55 am

Fossil:

Stone bone.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 6:22 pm

Hail, Baz, those who are about to compete salute you!

Thumbs down? Yeah...

Fossilization is a scientific example of transubstantiation, which is the conversion of one material or substance into another. In this case, organic compounds get mineralized. But much like the Catholic Church doesn't push the mechanics of alcohol to hemoglobin, I just went with a general idea. But unlike the Church, it still works if put to the test.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/fossil

It's not rocket science, it's...well...at least I think it's poetry.

I guess I took a minimalist approach! :mrgreen:
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 7:13 pm

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Sat Apr 26, 2008 8:31 am

The essence of the subject in a nut sea shell !

Perhaps you could pare it down a little? ..
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Sat Apr 26, 2008 1:41 pm

Too wordy for me - but I love the use of metre and punctuation.
fine words butter no parsnips
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