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barrie
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 4:06 pm

At Cold Seduction
I had to get off the train -
wrong destination.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 4:19 pm

"Wrong destination",
said Death-- as he put me back
into my body.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 4:24 pm

Into my body
the mad surgeon plunged his hands -
"Nice liver", he said.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 5:04 pm

"Nice liver", he said.
Cirrhosis was a charmer.
A real smooth talker.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 5:30 pm

A real smooth talker
Never tells you the whole truth
They'll talk you to death.
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Sun Dec 14, 2008 6:05 pm

They'll talk you to Death,
then poor Death is stuck with you,
no conversation.
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In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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No conversation
Would ever be low enough
For a cad like you
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 3:02 pm

for a cad like you
there's no medicine to cure
doctors shake their heads
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 9:41 pm

Doctors shake their heads,
you have been taken from us.
Rest in peace Mother.
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 12:59 pm

Rest in peace, Mother.
I’ll get you breakfast in bed;
snail-flavoured porridge!
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Snail flavoured porridge,
it's all the rage in Glasgow -
in the French quarter.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 6:27 pm

in the French quarter
around the Tiananmen square
fireworks in the sky
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 6:57 pm

Fireworks in the sky
and the bright flashing lights of
modern day Paris
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 8:11 pm

Modern day Paris
is just as tantalising
as Lutetia
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 1:20 am

As Lutetia,
faced the Île de la Cité,
she was forgotten.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 3:31 am

she was forgotten
like a transient flower
a shooting star falls
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A shooting star falls
The mouth of heaven opens
To welcome her in
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:00 pm

To welcome her in,
I put the past behind me;
started life anew.
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Started life anew
But the grass was no greener
Guess I'll try again
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 3:37 am

Guess I'll try again.
She won't get away this time.
Rope, sock, scissors. Check.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 3:48 am

Rope, sock, scissors - Check?
What sort of chess game is this?
Please help me bishop!
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 3:56 am

Please help me, Bishop!
The aliens are coming!
Acid-filled bastards.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 4:07 am

Acid-filled bastards,
met them all in the Sixties -
but what a decade!
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But what a decade
can do to a man, a heart...
Stay away from girls!
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 4:17 am

Stay away from girls
Said my wife with gun in hand
Aiming it downward
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