Influenced

[Danté]

Influenced



Quiet grass complies with wind

Wind aroused by moon and sea

Sea has waves to shift the sand

Sand of time wears not my soul

Soul may find new place to rest

Rest then rise to meet your love

Love that’s pure without an end

End not found, might now begin


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[Cooper]

Hmmmmmmmmm

it's loooovely, and soo thoughtful.. but generic and a little cliche

[Lake]

A gentle train of thought that's woven by the last word of the previous line and the first word of the following line.
Though kind of familiar, I like the gentleness and quiet grass complies with wind. The title works well too - each element is influenced by the other.

Thanks for the read.

Lake

[arunansu]

Absolutely charming write! Love this.

[Cooper]

just come across this again, and will take back what i said before..

really like it, nice pace tone etc good stuff

[mesmie]

Dante

I like what you do with this...the flow works well, trails down the page so smoothly.
nice one sir.

mes

[Tramontane]

there is an innocent simplicity to this both in the use of one liners which compact a lot of meaning into so few words.
and secondly a natural flow which mimics the beautiful relationships we see in nature,moon,wind,waves,sand

linking these strong images to massive emotions and concepts such as love,time and rest works for me in this piece
but the line

Love that’s pure without an end

does sound like something bonnie tyler might have sang! its just so v.v difficult to express love with out using a cliche and we both know that, i guess and i couldn't think of anything less cliched

the end line End not found, might now begin is a strong and profound end to a short tailored write

[Danté]

Thanks all,

Cooper, I never expected to see this one raked up again.
I am glad you did, thank you.

Thanks mesmie, much appreciated.

Tramontane,

The difficulty in this piece is the structure, identical line lengths
especially when formatted in times new roman.
I knew I was not going to invent the wheel with some of the language
as such subjects are very well worked already, so there are a few
aspects of this that are difficult to make up for that.

all the best

Danté

[Lovely]

Dante looking at it again it says with a meaning for me. Couldn't connect it's flow at first
think I see it now. Loved the mesage about infinite love and how deep it is for you to.

Nice.

DJL

[backinblack]

I liked it alot, an interesting play on the wind aspect.
Great imagery and loved the emotional spin on it also.
Great read
Thanks

BinB.

[Lovely]

Dar bib, now begings (ends) better for me. Loved it, a nice paint sir.

DJL