Radio waves, silent
dancing on every roof and beam.
The mambo, the Charleston,
I wonder where they’ve been?
Wireless and cables endlessly searching,
looking for compatibility.
Antenna’s erect, waiting,
For loves young dream.
The dance goes on,
the players know the scene.
ballroom lit in spectrums
of purple and green.
Penetrating, infiltrating,
searching out, the router waiting.
Interfacing, gyrating.
Bound by flex, softwares entwined,
gently encrypted, then realigned.
Radio waves
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Last edited by backinblack on Tue Mar 31, 2009 6:09 pm, edited 3 times in total.
Poems everybody...poems.. the laddie fancies himself a poet!..Pink Floyd-The wall.
Bnb
I like the subjects you come up with.
There are some good ideas in this piece and the whole thing reads well, although you might want to
sort out the few errant capitals that might be cause for some readers to stumble.
I was wondering about forever, in the last stanza and whether it was a little rigid in the context
of the constantly shifting nature of this type of technology.
Another enjoyable piece
good stuff
Danté
I like the subjects you come up with.
There are some good ideas in this piece and the whole thing reads well, although you might want to
sort out the few errant capitals that might be cause for some readers to stumble.
I was wondering about forever, in the last stanza and whether it was a little rigid in the context
of the constantly shifting nature of this type of technology.
Another enjoyable piece
good stuff
Danté
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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BinB
I love the way you have taken us through the history of radio!
This poem is enjoyable to read like a good cup of coffee on a sunny day. lol.
It shows that you enjoy writing and take the time to formulate your ideas well, nice work!
Thanks for the read.
Suzanne
I love the way you have taken us through the history of radio!
This poem is enjoyable to read like a good cup of coffee on a sunny day. lol.
It shows that you enjoy writing and take the time to formulate your ideas well, nice work!
Thanks for the read.
Suzanne
Dear BinB, it's a nice flow but please look at the points above mentioned with love.
I think you express most in this rock and roll as it were.
Love your sincere energy and work which is a gift from the gods.
DJL
I think you express most in this rock and roll as it were.
Love your sincere energy and work which is a gift from the gods.
DJL
This is nicely done, BinB. I think I'd have enjoyed it more on the radio level alone, without the saucy double entendres, but that wasn't what you wanted to do and fair play to you. You do it well.
S1 is still my favourite, though.
Cheers
David
S1 is still my favourite, though.
Cheers
David
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Hi, big thanks to all who offered advice and took the the to read this.
I'm glad you liked it.
Best to all
B
I'm glad you liked it.
Best to all
B
Poems everybody...poems.. the laddie fancies himself a poet!..Pink Floyd-The wall.
You provide some great visuals in S2 and S3. The last strophe... perhaps a revise? There are too many "ing" sounding verbs. Overall, I liked the piece immensely. Nice title.