Adaptation

[Danté]

Adaptation

I should have fixed it.
She pulled cashmere
over her head.
The light-bulb swung,
dropped to the floor.
Desperate for the view.
It was gone, sucked
up the broken socket.
My optic nerves
clung hard to an outline
while my tongue
redefined its role
by filling in the detail.


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[arunansu]

Cleverly written as ever. Specially liked the ending lines and the title.Enjoyed.

[wabbit]

Now that ... is good

[Jasper]

by filling in the detail.
Should in not be out here, D... de-tail wise?

You remind me muchly of Swep Lovitt... he too is brilliant!

J

Later add... I'd drop that She for simply Pulling in L2... and

I should have fixed it.
Pulling cashmere
over her head
the light-bulb swung,
drops across the floor

desperate for a view.
It was gone, sucked
up the broken socket

my optic nerves
clung hard to an outline
while my tongue
redefined its role
filling in the blank(s).

Maybe?

[Suzanne]

Dante,

Oooooo. This is great. You do these little things so well, it is enough to make us all just shake our heads and want to give up. What kind of encouragement it that? Sheesh.

This is good.

and, oh! so pleasant to ponder.
Suzanne

[Lovely]

Dick Tracy, sounds.

I love when you're deep. Dante.

I think your' orig. Be you always please for me. Like everyday is a thirsty day for spring?

L xxx