isolation

[arunansu]

I.

granite Ganesha
reclining on a mowed lawn--
fallen red petals

II.

fickle-minded breeze
swings a door --
she left it ajar

III.

tree-shaped key holder
forlorn
with that empty hook

IV.

mournful sitar
makes me an Emperor
submerges the Taj

[wabbit]

Sorry but this is probably to clever for me

[JonJonJon]

I like this because it is clean, simple and has a easy rhytmn....

[Jasper]

The ing of anything be a big NO NO in this form, A! And only 1 is 5-7-5!
I don't care what Basho or contemporary poets said/say neither!

J

[arunansu]

Wabbit, am I so clever?

Thanks Jon for your time on this one.

Jasper,
I'm not in a mood for bashing up the great Basho!Chuckles.
Yeah, the 5-7-5 format is not compulsory in English. Though the great debate is still going on. And about the "ing" thing, there is only one!
Thanks.

[Suzanne]

Aru,

Yes, you are clever with your sparse words.

I liked the third the best, but smiled at the fickle-minded breeze. It is a nice description.
Quite lonesome.

Suzanne

[Lovely]

Honestly really I am always wanting to give but i just don't know how it sounds---it's a kind of Thai, you are (forang) love you loads.


It could unfold but I feel lost perhaps it is me though no disrepect here though--- oh not.

Let's get something right here. Please join us and develop slowly. Sparse words are one thing
wisdom and deliverence quite another..........honestly. Love your courage that is very worthy.

Love to see you soon.

Lx

[arunansu]

Thank you Suzanne and Lovely for your replies.Smiles.

[Summersky]

These are beautiful haiku. I liked the number II best. It felt very lonely, I think you did a good job. Summersky