Kolkata snapshots - IV

[arunansu]

Tanka poem

I.

soccer ball
fleetingly hides
an afternoon sun
sweat glistens
on mud-splattered bodies

II.

pictures of gods
up for sale
beside cinema hall
a huddled crowd
around a rammed motorbike


III.

lengthy queue
outside a wine shop
a lost puppy
chased by an urchin
searches for its master

[gpierre]

bump

[Mic]

Hi Aru.

I do like these poetically rendered snapshots of the everyday - always. They are kinda like the 'tapas' of poetry, if you get me. Small, colourful, vivid and varied dishes. You manage to make the ordinary shine. And you make it look effortless! But I'm sure there's plenty of elbow greese goes into these. Like very much.

Mic

[Elphin]

neat snapshots aru

I like 2 best, 3 is a bit of a cliche though with the lost puppy.

Mic "tapas of poetry" is a smashing phrase

elph

[arunansu]

Thanks Mike for the "tapas of poetry".

Thanks Elphin. About the "lost pup", actually I have seen such scenes with my own eyes! I know it may sound a bit cliched. Thanks for the reply and the time.

Thanks Gpierre for the "bump".

[Lovely]

Snapshot, but not you.


My guitar gently weeps always for you...

Lxx

[arunansu]

Sweet of you to say that!

[Helen Bywater]

Hi again,

Another slight misuse of English here. We wouldn't say "a puppy searches its master". We'd say it "searches for its master". We do use "search" on its own in a sentence like "I've searched the house for my missing keys" or "I've searched the whole house, but I still can't find my keys". It would be correct to say "the puppy searched the streets for its master". In other words, you have to add "for" if you're talking about something you're trying to find. "Search" on its own refers to where you're looking for it (trying to find it).

I hope my explanation's clear.

Helen

[arunansu]

That was really helpful. Thank you FOR the help.

[Helen Bywater]

My pleasure.