Haiku Train

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Sat Jul 04, 2009 3:40 pm

this hive is moving
it's a humming energy
looking for release.
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Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:46 pm

Looking for release,
the captive, trafficked children
did as they were bid.
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Sun Jul 05, 2009 9:31 am

did as they were bid
a tid bit id diddly,
pocketing their quid.
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Mon Jul 20, 2009 4:30 pm

Pocketing their quid,
they met carnivorous squid,
and stayed for dinner.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Mon Jul 20, 2009 9:09 pm

and stayed for dinner
and wanted to stay longer
of course I miss you.
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Tue Jul 21, 2009 6:27 am

Of course I miss you,
but that restraining order
keeps me far away.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Jul 21, 2009 7:39 pm

keeps me far away
but under the twinkling stars
and a smiling moon.
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Sun Jul 26, 2009 1:12 pm

and a smiling moon,
high above my clay feet winks;
I pretend it's you.
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Mon Jul 27, 2009 3:07 am

I pretend it's you.
I know you don't really care.
I'll just make believe.
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Sun Aug 02, 2009 1:42 pm

I'll just make believe
you are not so far away,
but standing right here.
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Mon Aug 10, 2009 7:46 pm

...but standing right here
it all becomes so very
trivial. luv u.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Mon Aug 10, 2009 7:51 pm

"trivial. luv u."
is not what I expected,
life is full of twists.
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Tue Aug 11, 2009 1:12 am

life is full of twists
so it's best if you can dance
I'll take off my boots.
"A bit of stubble always remains to fuel the fire." Greta Garbo
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Tue Aug 11, 2009 5:50 pm

I'll take my boots off
I'll take your boots off, too,
a great place to start.
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Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:56 pm

a great place to start
is looking in the mirror
into your own eyes.
"A bit of stubble always remains to fuel the fire." Greta Garbo
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Fri Aug 21, 2009 5:43 pm

Into your own eyes
goes the very sun you swore
you would evade, Tom.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:19 am

you would evade, Tom
the middle-aged monsoon
gravity of trees
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Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:42 am

gravity of trees
discarded appendages --
sparrow takes a flight
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Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:47 am

sparrow takes a flight
rests upon a bough
beside her window
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Fri Aug 28, 2009 4:41 pm

beside her window
hollowly sits a glass bowl;
the phone rings silent.
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 1:30 am

the phone rings silent
chimes swallowed by wallpaper
now I hear my breath
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:39 am

now I hear my breath
a flower vase tumbles
in a sudden breeze
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:41 am

in a sudden breeze
I hear the echoes
of lost words
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:43 am

of lost words
lost springs
lost leaves
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Sun Aug 30, 2009 8:11 am

lost leaves
to be resurrected
in a fresh spring
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