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Gazelle
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 6:34 pm

sparrow seeks shelter
sharp hail wounds tender grasses
hide under my eaves.
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Mon Oct 26, 2009 2:52 pm

hides under my eaves
an aborigine
as God thunders
Lake
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Mon Oct 26, 2009 7:20 pm

as God thunders
summer snows, winter pours
poets rise from graves
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Mon Oct 26, 2009 8:03 pm

poets rise from graves
cast shadows on our bookshelves
tidy words on page
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:04 pm

tidy words on page
neat and unpunctuated
ungrammatical
Lake
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:18 pm

ungrammatical
to some, gifted to others -
the poet’s license
Michelle
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:23 pm

the poet’s license
to take life experience
and create artwork
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:35 pm

"and create artwork!"
God sayeth to Damian,
"Pickle a dead cow!"
Lake
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:55 pm

pickle a dead cow
salt a fat pig on big board
altar offerings
Michelle
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Tue Oct 27, 2009 7:41 pm

altar offerings
guillotined babes swathed in blood
in nursemaid's backyard
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
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Thu Oct 29, 2009 4:40 am

in nursemaid's backyard
my discarded heart
I'm living on a motor
Lake
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Thu Oct 29, 2009 5:52 pm

I live on motor
heart clenching as gas goes up
I want my feet back
Michelle
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Thu Oct 29, 2009 9:49 pm

"I want my feet back!"
I screamed at the boat's captain,
who used toes for bait.
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
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Sat Oct 31, 2009 7:59 am

Who used toes for bait?
Succulent appendages
but too many bones.
Marc
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Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:14 pm

But too many bones
are buried in my garden.
Some of them human.



(Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha,! :evil: happy hallowe'en haiku homies! :twisted: )
Marc
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Sat Oct 31, 2009 5:41 pm

Some of them human
and zombie mutants are
slurping tasty brains.


(Happy halloween, Marc! mmm brains)
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
kozmikdave
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Sun Nov 01, 2009 4:20 am

Slurping tasty brains
can pass on kuru - so you
walk like a zombie
Gazelle
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Sun Nov 01, 2009 12:04 pm

Walk like a zombie
I plod 'round an empty room
my bones seek warm flesh.
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Mon Nov 02, 2009 9:37 am

my bones seek warm flesh
Jack -O-Lantern scorns
wanton eyes glow
arunansu
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Thu Nov 05, 2009 9:51 am

wanton eyes glow
owl pierces a flimsy night
stars, shaken
arunansu
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Fri Nov 06, 2009 10:00 am

stars, shaken
Kiliminjaro, throat-slit
fountain of sparks
Marc
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Sat Nov 07, 2009 2:00 am

Fountain of sparks:
the guys coital explosion,
bonfire ignition.
Lake
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Sun Nov 08, 2009 5:12 pm

bonfire ignition
startled stars across the sky
falling meteoroid
arunansu
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Mon Nov 09, 2009 4:31 am

falling meteoroid
my mind
on a cup of tea
Lake
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Wed Nov 11, 2009 4:46 am

on a cup of tea
a fly
rubs its hands and legs
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